整洁— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct awkward phrases (e.g., “maintain that stay” → “keep that up”; “keep things always clean” → “keep things clean”).

範例: I like to keep things tidy, but I find it hard to keep that up consistently. For example, when I moved to London last September I tried to keep my flat neat, but my belongings became messy quickly whenever I was busy with work or study.

建議: Answer directly and fix grammar (use “didn’t use to” or “didn’t keep my room tidy”). Be brief and provide one clear reason with a linking word. Avoid redundancy like repeating the same idea.

範例: No, I didn’t use to keep my room tidy as a child because I shared it with my older brother. Since he took responsibility for cleaning, I rarely helped and our room stayed tidy without my effort.

建議: Use precise vocabulary and correct small errors (e.g., “surface of disk” → “desk surface”). Combine techniques into a short, coherent answer using linking words like “also” or “so”. Mention specific routines or frequency for concreteness.

範例: I usually wipe my desk surface with a cloth and only keep essential items like my laptop and a pencil case. Also, I tidy up at the end of each day, so I’m less likely to be distracted when I study.

建議: Make the opinion clear and correct grammar (e.g., “people who do their job really well”). Provide a concise reason and a specific example to support the claim, using a linking word like “for example” or “because”.

範例: Yes, I think being tidy is important because it creates a professional impression. For example, colleagues who keep their bags and shoes clean often appear more organized and trustworthy in client meetings.

× No, I didn't used to keep myself clean by myself.

✓ No, I didn't use to keep myself clean by myself.

After did (auxiliary for past negative), the base form of the verb should be used. 'Used' is incorrect because 'did' already marks past tense; use 'use' (in the pattern 'didn't use to') to indicate past habitual action.

× Yes, I would like to keep things tidy, but it's very challenging for me to maintain that stay for a long time.

✓ Yes, I would like to keep things tidy, but it's very challenging for me to maintain that state for a long time.

The noun 'stay' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is 'state' (a condition). Use 'state' to refer to maintaining a tidy condition. Also the present modal 'would like' is OK; ensure noun choice matches meaning.

× I decided I would keep things always clean, but I couldn't because my belongings became messy very easily and quickly, especially when I was busy.

✓ I decided I would always keep things clean, but I couldn't because my belongings became messy very easily, especially when I was busy.

Word order: adverb 'always' should come before the verb phrase 'keep things clean'. Also 'very easily and quickly' is redundant; keep a single adverb 'very easily' or 'quickly' to improve clarity.

× I usually keep my study space clean by wiping the surface of disk by a cloth.

✓ I usually keep my study space clean by wiping the surface of the desk with a cloth.

Two issues: 'disk' is likely a misspelling of 'desk'. Use 'desk' for study surface. Also use 'with' rather than 'by' when indicating the instrument used to wipe. 'Wiping' is correct as a gerund after 'by' but change preposition for correctness.

× In addition, I've determined to leave only essential items for studying, such as my pencils and laptop.

✓ In addition, I've decided to leave only essential items for studying, such as my pencils and laptop.

The verb 'determine' with infinitive is awkward here; native usage is 'decided to' or 'am determined to'. 'I've determined to' is nonstandard; use 'I've decided to' for past decision or 'I'm determined to' for present determination.

× By doing that, I'm not distracted by others when I concentrate on studying or reading books.

✓ By doing that, I'm not distracted when I concentrate on studying or reading.

'Distracted by others' is acceptable but unnecessary if speaker is referring to general distractions; shortening to 'not distracted' is clearer. Also 'reading books' can be shortened to 'reading' to avoid redundancy.

× No, I didn't used to keep myself clean by myself. At that time, I shared my room with my older brother and he was responsible enough to maintain cleanliness for a long time.

✓ No, I didn't use to keep myself clean by myself. At that time, I shared my room with my older brother and he was responsible enough to keep the room clean for me.

The phrase 'maintain cleanliness for a long time' is awkward. Use 'keep the room clean for me' to indicate the brother did the cleaning. Also corrected 'used' to base form after 'did' as above.

× Therefore, I didn't have to do anything at all. Instead, he always kept our room clean.

✓ Therefore, I didn't have to do anything at all. He always kept our room clean instead.

Stylistic: moving 'instead' to the end sounds more natural. Grammar is otherwise correct.

× Yes, I definitely think keeping belongings and items clean is necessary, especially for business people.

✓ Yes, I definitely think keeping personal belongings clean is necessary, especially for business people.

'Belongings and items' is redundant. Use 'personal belongings' as a clearer noun phrase. Also 'the' is not required here.

× In my experience, people who can their job really well always keep their items such as bags and shoes very clean, so it can be seen as a symbol of professionalism and trust.

✓ In my experience, people who do their jobs really well always keep items such as bags and shoes very clean, so this can be seen as a symbol of professionalism and trust.

There is a missing verb after 'who can' — should be 'who do their jobs' or 'who can do their jobs'. Use 'do their jobs' for clarity. Also 'their items such as bags and shoes' can be 'items such as bags and shoes' and use 'this' to refer to the practice. Adjusted plural agreement for 'jobs' and verb 'do'.