整洁— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and clear: start with a concise topic sentence stating whether you like to keep things tidy, then give one or two specific reasons with simple linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and grammar errors (e.g. subject-verb agreement, odd expressions like "a little bit over CD"). Use precise vocabulary like "organized" or "neat."

範例: Yes, I do. I’m a very organized person, so I like to keep my things in order. For example, I arrange my books and clothes neatly on shelves and label boxes so I can find items easily.

建議: Give a clear past-tense topic sentence then provide a specific example using linking words (e.g. "for example", "because"). Fix tense consistency and reduce repetition. Mention one or two concrete habits and explain the effect on you.

範例: Yes, I did. As a child I always folded my clothes and checked shelves for dust or newspapers before putting items away. For example, I would fold my school uniform every evening because a tidy room helped me feel calm and concentrate on homework.

建議: Answer directly: say how you keep the space tidy (e.g. decluttering, storage, set routine). Use clear sequencing and linking words (e.g. "first", "then") and correct unclear phrases ("room address" and pronoun confusion). Keep within 3–4 sentences and give a concise routine.

範例: I keep my study area tidy by clearing my desk at the end of each day. First, I put away notebooks and chargers in a drawer and only leave the materials I need for the next session. This routine helps me study without distractions.

建議: This is a good direct answer. To improve, expand with one specific reason or a short example using a linking word like "because" or "for example." Use slightly more formal vocabulary such as "concentrate" or "productive."

範例: Yes, I think it’s necessary because a tidy environment reduces distractions and helps you concentrate. For example, when my desk is organized I can work faster and feel less stressed.

× I'm a kind of a person who keep things steady because I have a little bit over CD so that I keep my things in a proper way.

✓ I'm the kind of person who keeps things steady because I have a few CDs, so I keep my things in a proper way.

Errors: 'a kind of a person' - article and idiom; use 'the kind of person'. 'keep' should be 'keeps' for subject-verb agreement (third person singular). 'a little bit over CD' is ungrammatical; intended meaning is plural 'a few CDs'. Use a comma before 'so'. Suggestion: use 'the kind of person who keeps' and correct noun number to 'CDs'.

× Yes, I always keep my clothes folded and before put them on the shelf I make sure there is no newspaper underneath the clothes and and always keep my rooms clean and so that it makes me comfortable and stay focused on the work.

✓ Yes, I always keep my clothes folded, and before I put them on the shelf I make sure there are no newspapers underneath the clothes. I also always keep my room clean because it makes me comfortable and helps me stay focused on my work.

Errors: missing subject in 'before put them' — needs 'I put' (sentence structure). 'there is no newspaper' should be plural 'there are no newspapers' matching plural noun (singular/plural issue). 'rooms' should be singular 'room' if speaking about own room (quantity/agreement). Run-on sentence and awkward connectors — split into sentences and use 'helps me stay' for clarity. Use consistent present simple tense for habitual actions.

× I wake up before my room address and I don't want to disturb him by turning the light, so I take my things like study materials including laptop notebooks to the balcony where I can study peacefully.

✓ I get up before my roommate and, because I don't want to disturb him by turning on the light, I take my study materials, including my laptop and notebooks, to the balcony where I can study peacefully.

Errors: 'wake up before my room address' is incorrect phrase; likely 'roommate' was intended (incorrect word choice -> pronoun/noun error). 'turning the light' needs 'turning on the light' (preposition/verb phrase). 'laptop notebooks' is unclear; separate items 'laptop and notebooks'. Use commas for apposition. 'get up before my roommate' fits natural usage. Fix sentence structure and word choice for clarity.

× There's only me. May not go on laptop, that's all. So stay focused.

✓ I'm the only one out there, so I don't use my laptop; that's all. That way I can stay focused.

Errors: 'There's only me' is informal and can be clearer as 'I'm the only one'. 'May not go on laptop' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'I don't use my laptop' or 'I may not use my laptop'. Pronoun reference and modal usage unclear. Restructure to show purpose 'so I can stay focused.'

× Yeah, it's necessary to keep your environment clean and tidy. That helps to stay focused on your work or study.

✓ Yes, it's necessary to keep your environment clean and tidy. That helps you stay focused on your work or studies.

Errors: 'Yeah' informal -> 'Yes' preferred in test context. 'helps to stay' should be 'helps you stay' — include subject pronoun. 'work or study' better as 'work or studies' (parallel nouns). Maintain present simple for general truth.