整洁— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce hesitation and redundancy; give a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to make your reasoning logical. Keep to 3-4 concise sentences and finish your thought clearly.

範例: Yes, I like to keep things tidy. For example, I clean my room every day because a neat space helps me feel calm and work more efficiently. As a result, I can find things quickly and waste less time looking for them.

建議: Structure your answer: state clearly whether you used to be tidy, then give one specific example and a brief contrast with now. Avoid filler words and grammatical errors (use past tense for childhood).

範例: No, I didn't use to keep my room tidy as a child. I often left toys and clothes on the floor, so my mother had to tidy up for me. Now I clean and organize my room myself every day.

建議: Be specific about your method and use clearer vocabulary (e.g., 'workspace', 'put items back in their places'). Use linking words to sequence steps (first, then, finally). Reduce hesitation and correct word choice and grammar.

範例: I keep my study space tidy by putting items back in their places as soon as I finish using them. First, I clear papers into a folder, then I put pens in a cup and return books to the shelf. This routine saves time and keeps my desk clutter-free.

建議: Answer directly, then give clear reasons with one or two specific examples. Avoid repeating words and fix grammar (e.g., 'it depends', 'I get anxious'). Use linking words (because, so) to connect cause and effect.

範例: I think it depends on the person, but for me being tidy is very important because a messy room makes me feel anxious and distracted. For example, when my desk is cluttered I find it hard to focus, so I clean it before studying to improve my concentration.

× 'Yes uh, honestly, uh, my father told me that if you make anything uh, as tidy as possible, umm, you will make anything just better than you expect.'

✓ 'Yes, honestly, my father told me that if you make anything as tidy as possible, it will turn out better than you expect.'

'Anything' is singular and requires singular reference; 'you will make anything just better' is awkward and has subject-verb/reference issues. Change to 'it will turn out better' to agree in number and improve clarity. Also remove filler words and fix word order.'

× 'Umm, like I always just umm, clean my room. I always clean my room like for everyday.'

✓ 'I always clean my room every day.'

'For everyday' is incorrect; use the adverbial phrase every day. Repeating 'I always' is redundant; keep one present simple verb 'clean' for habitual action.'

× 'And I just feel the things will be smoothly continue when I have a clear and.'

✓ 'And I just feel things will continue smoothly when my space is clear.'

'Things will be smoothly continue' is incorrect word order and uses wrong form; 'continue' should follow the adverb 'smoothly'. Also complete the sentence by specifying 'space' and use passive adjective 'is clear' to be grammatical.'

× 'Umm I will give another no because when I was a kid I even don't know what is tidy means umm so I always make my room a mess and my mother will help me to clean my room but nowadays I just clean my room by myself and I make everything organized.'

✓ 'No. When I was a kid I didn't even know what tidy meant, so I always made my room a mess and my mother helped me clean it. Nowadays I clean my room myself and make everything organized.'

Past-time context requires past tense: use 'didn't know', 'meant', and 'made'. 'Will help' and present forms are inappropriate for past habitual actions; change to 'helped'. Also adjust pronouns and remove extraneous words for clarity.'

× 'From my perspective, I think it's really easy to keep the place where I work tightly.'

✓ 'From my perspective, I think it's really easy to keep the place where I work tidy.'

The adjective 'tightly' is incorrect here; 'tidy' describes orderliness of a place. 'Tightly' refers to tightness and is a wrong prepositional/adverbial choice.'

× 'For example, uh, will you, uh, use something that, uh, in your workplace, you can, after finish your, umm, working with that things, you can just return them, umm, into where they are.'

✓ 'For example, use items at your workplace only when needed and, after finishing working with them, return them to where they belong.'

Original sentence is disfluent and ungrammatical. Restructure to a clear imperative/explanatory sentence: 'after finishing' uses the gerund phrase correctly and 'return them to where they belong' fixes preposition and noun issues.'

× 'Act where they are firstly firstly in or on the table so you can umm, save your time on this.'

✓ 'Put them back in their proper place on the table first so you can save time.'

Adverb placement and word order are incorrect ('firstly firstly in or on the table'). Use 'first' before the verb phrase and 'in/on the table' as the location. Simplify wording for clarity.'

× 'Umm, it's depends on different people, but I think, uh, for me, it is really necessary for me to be really tidy.'

✓ 'It depends on different people, but I think for me it is really necessary to be tidy.'

'It's depends' is ungrammatical; use 'it depends' (present simple without contraction of 'it is' before 'depends'). Remove redundant 'for me' and duplicate 'really' for concision.'

× 'Uh, for example, when I fill my room or my workplace, umm, is a mess.'

✓ 'For example, when my room or workplace is a mess,'

'Fill my room' is incorrect; likely meant 'if' or 'when my room or workplace is a mess'. Fix sentence start and subject order to 'when my room or workplace is a mess'.'{

× 'I will really get a lot a little bit ****** *** because I really, umm, cannot focus on my study or.'

✓ 'I become a little stressed because I cannot focus on my studies or my work.'

'I will really get' mixes future with present; for general reaction use present simple 'I become' or 'I feel'. 'a lot a little bit' is contradictory — choose 'a little stressed'. Use plural 'studies' and complete 'work'.'},{