整洁— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 简化并更自然地表达原因，减少语法和用词错误。注意逻辑连接词的使用和单词拼写（如 letters 应为 little 或删除）。建议用一到两句话明确观点，再用一到两句具体说明如何影响情绪与注意力。

範例: Yes, I like to keep things tidy because a clean room improves my mood. When my space is organized, I feel more relaxed and can concentrate better on my work.

建議: 回答要更流畅并注意时态与表达自然性。避免重复句子（This is important）。用连接词说明原因，并用正确的形容词比较（easier）。可以补充具体例子说明如何被教导。

範例: Yes, I did. My mother always asked me to tidy my room every day so I learned to put things back in their places. This made it easier for me to find toys and school supplies.

建議: 句子结构和词汇使用需改进（‘I’m an artist’，‘screw my paper’应为‘sort my papers’等）。保持回答具体但简洁，使用连接词列出动作并说明频率或原因。注意冠词和介词用法。

範例: I'm an artist, so I clean my studio regularly. I sort my papers, wipe away excess paint, and wash my brushes after each session to keep the space tidy.

建議: 表达观点清晰，但句子可更自然并避免重复（space or area）。用更准确的词语谈论卫生（hygiene）并给出简短具体理由或例子。

範例: Yes, I think being tidy is necessary because it helps maintain good hygiene and reduces the risk of germs. For example, cleaning regularly prevents dust buildup and keeps the room healthier.

× Yes, I always keep things tidy letters because a tidy room can let me improve my mood and I will feel relaxed and focused.

✓ Yes, I always keep things tidy because a tidy room can improve my mood and make me feel relaxed and focused.

句中“tidy letters”是不必要且错误的短语，疑似多余词。用法上应省去“letters”。另外“can let me improve my mood”和“I will feel”在表达上不自然。用“can improve my mood”更简洁，“make me feel relaxed and focused”是更常见的搭配。建议删除多余词并使用常见动词搭配。

× Yes, when I was a child my mom told me I need to keep a room tidy.

✓ Yes, when I was a child my mom told me I needed to keep my room tidy.

这是过去背景（when I was a child / told），所以后半句的动词应使用过去时态：用“needed”而不是“need”。另外，冠词和指代上应使用“my room”而不是“a room”。建议在叙述过去事件时保持时态一致。

× This is important.

✓ This was important.

该句位于描述过去习惯的语境（when I was a child），因此应使用过去时“was”来保持时态一致。

× That is because I can find the item more easy.

✓ That is because I can find items more easily.

“more easy”是不正确的比较结构。应使用副词“easily”修饰动词“find”，并用“items”复数更自然。若用比较级应为“easier”，但这里表达方式更自然为“find items more easily”。另外保持时态（can find）在此情境可接受。

× I'm artist so I always need to clean my studio.

✓ I'm an artist, so I always need to clean my studio.

名词前通常需要冠词，“artist”前应加不定冠词“an”。另外句中缺少连词逗号隔开更清晰。建议在职业前加冠词并使用连接词分句。

× I screw my paper and clean my pigment and wash my brush so I always keep in my studio tidy.

✓ I sort my papers, clean my pigments and wash my brushes, so I always keep my studio tidy.

原句中“screw my paper”是错误用词，应改为“sort my papers”或“stack/organize papers”。“brush”复数为“brushes”。“keep in my studio tidy”语序错误，应为“keep my studio tidy”。建议使用正确的动词搭配并调整单复数与语序。

× I think it is necessary.

✓ I think it is necessary.

此句本身语法正确，无需改动。保持原句以匹配现在观点陈述。

× That is because keeping a space or area tidy can prevent bacteria and illness and you will have a better space to keep sanitization.

✓ That is because keeping a space or area tidy can prevent bacteria and illness, and you will have a cleaner space.

“prevent bacteria and illness”搭配可接受，但“a better space to keep sanitization”表达不自然且“keep sanitization”用法错误。应改为“a cleaner space”或“help maintain hygiene”。建议使用“cleaner space”或“help maintain hygiene”来表达更自然的意思。