整洁— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more concise and fix minor grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific reason and a brief example. Avoid repetition (you said staying organized twice). Use linking words like because and so to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I do. I find that a tidy environment helps me concentrate because clutter distracts me, so I always put things back in their place after using them, which makes studying much more efficient.

建議: Answer directly, then expand with a specific detail or contrast. Correct tense and reduce repetition (e.g., 'cleaned cleaned'). Use linking words like 'but' or 'however' to show change over time.

範例: No, I didn't. Like many children, I rarely tidied my room and my mother usually did it for me, but now I prefer to keep my home clean because it makes me feel more responsible.

建議: Structure the reply: state one or two concrete methods, use linking words (for example, so) and give a short reason. Avoid unclear phrases like 'All small things, they become bigger.' Be specific about routines or storage solutions.

範例: I keep only essential items on my desk and regularly clear away loose papers; for example, I use a drawer and labeled folders so small items don't pile up and distract me.

建議: Give a direct opinion followed by one or two clear reasons and a brief example. Fix sentence fragments and repetition. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect clauses and be specific about benefits (e.g., saves time, reduces stress).

範例: Yes, I do, because a tidy space reduces distractions and saves time when I look for things, so I organize my shelves and label boxes to keep everything easy to find.

× Yes, staying organized is important for me because my if my surroundings are messy I easily get distracted, so I always try to stay organized.

✓ Yes, staying organized is important to me because if my surroundings are messy I easily get distracted, so I always try to stay organized.

Use 'important to someone' not 'important for someone'; remove extra 'my'. Also ensure present simple 'get distracted' fits habitual situation.

× No, I don't think so. Like many other children I didn't clean up my room so usually my mom cleaned cleaned it up for me.

✓ No, I don't think so. Like many other children, I didn't clean up my room, so usually my mom cleaned it up for me.

Remove duplicated word 'cleaned'. Use past simple consistently for past habits; add commas for clarity.

× But now I like cleaning up my house.

✓ But now I like to clean up my house.

Both 'like cleaning' and 'like to clean' are possible; 'like to clean' is more natural here when contrasting past and present preference. Keep present simple to indicate current habit.

× At first I only keep essential things on my desk and plus I clean up.

✓ At first I only keep essential things on my desk, and I also clean up.

'At first' suggests initial action — better: 'I only keep' (present simple for habitual action). Remove 'plus' and use 'also' for addition; add comma and subject for clarity.

× All small things, they become bigger.

✓ Small things can become big problems if left cluttered.

Original has redundant subject 'All small things, they'. Combine into a single clear clause and clarify meaning; use modal 'can' to express potential.

× Yes, I think it is really necessary because if my surrounding is messy, I really. Easily get distracted.

✓ Yes, I think it is really necessary because if my surroundings are messy, I easily get distracted.

Fix sentence break and punctuation: remove stray period and join clause. Use plural 'surroundings' and present simple 'get distracted' for habitual consequence.

× So I always try to stay organized and also I. I can find the things with a tidy room.

✓ So I always try to stay organized because with a tidy room I can find things easily.

Original has sentence fragments ('I. I can...'). Combine into one coherent sentence. Use 'with a tidy room I can find things easily' for natural word order and present simple for habitual ability.