整洁— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and clear: state your view in one concise sentence, then give a specific reason with correct grammar. Avoid vague phrases and redundancy. Use linking words (because, for example) to connect ideas. Watch verb forms and articles (a/the), and choose accurate words (e.g. ‘wrinkled’ instead of ‘have much more damage’).

範例: I don't usually like to keep things very tidy because I find that folded clothes get creased easily. For example, if I fold my raincoat it often becomes wrinkled, so I prefer to hang it loosely.

建議: Answer directly with past tense and a clear reason. Use one topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Correct past-tense verbs and plural forms, and avoid repeating words. Use linking words such as ‘because’ or ‘so’.

範例: No, I didn't keep my room tidy when I was a child because my family and I didn't pay much attention to cleaning. As a result, toys and clothes were usually scattered on the floor.

建議: Give a clear routine with specific actions and use present simple. Keep it cohesive with linking words (for example, so, therefore). Avoid fillers like 'uh' and incomplete sentences. Use correct plural/singular forms and prepositions (on my desk, in their place).

範例: I keep my study space tidy by putting books on a shelf and returning pens to a cup after use. So, I always wipe the desk at the end of the day to make sure it's clean and ready for work.

建議: State a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons and a complete result. Use precise vocabulary (e.g. ‘hygiene’, ‘pests’, ‘health risks’) and complete the sentence. Use linking words such as ‘because’ and ‘so’ to structure the answer.

範例: Yes, I think it's important to be tidy because it improves hygiene and reduces pests. For example, keeping a garden and home clean lowers the risk of disease and makes the environment more pleasant.

× Uh, no, I don't like to keep things tidy because if I do that my stuff will be have much more damage.

✓ Uh, no, I don't like to keep things tidy because if I do that my stuff will have much more damage.

The error is the insertion of 'be' before the past participle 'have'. 'Will have' is the correct future tense modal + base verb construction. Remove 'be' to form 'will have'. Suggestion: use 'will have' for future possession or consequence.

× Something or some like a clothes, if I keep tidy it will be raincoat all over.

✓ Some things, like clothes, if I keep them tidy they will be all over, like raincoats.

The original uses 'Something or some like a clothes' incorrectly. Use 'some things' and plural 'clothes'. Also pronoun reference and word order were wrong: 'if I keep them tidy, they will be all over' is clearer. Suggestion: use 'some things' for unspecified items and match pronouns in number.

× No, I didn't give my room tidy when I was a child because we don't care about the room and we miss thing all over the room and make it so much dirty and.

✓ No, I didn't keep my room tidy when I was a child because we didn't care about the room and we left things all over the room and made it very dirty.

Multiple tense and verb choice errors: 'give my room tidy' is incorrect; use 'keep my room tidy'. Mixed present 'don't care' with past context—should be 'didn't care'. 'Miss thing' should be 'left things'. 'So much dirty' should be 'very dirty'. Suggestion: maintain past tense throughout and use correct verbs: 'keep', 'didn't care', 'left things', 'made it very dirty'.

× I always organize thing uh on their space, so I always make them clean and neat because I don't like mess anyway.

✓ I always organize things in their place, so I always keep them clean and neat because I don't like a mess anyway.

Singular 'thing' should be plural 'things'. 'On their space' is incorrect preposition and phrasing; use 'in their place'. 'Make them clean' is acceptable but 'keep them clean' is more natural. Also 'mess' as a countable noun here needs an article: 'a mess'. Suggestion: use plural nouns with correct prepositions and articles.

× If I do need and clean my working place it.

✓ If I need to, I clean my workplace.

The original is ungrammatical and incomplete. 'If I do need and clean my working place it' mixes auxiliary 'do' unnecessarily and lacks proper clause structure and ending. Use conditional 'If I need to, I clean my workplace' or 'If I need to, I tidy my workplace.' Suggestion: form complete conditional clauses and use infinitive 'need to'.

× Yes, of course it's really necessary to be tidy anyplace, even though your garden should be tidy, because when we clean our space there is less infection and less.

✓ Yes, of course it's really necessary to be tidy anywhere; even your garden should be tidy, because when we clean our space there is less infection and fewer germs.

'Anyplace' is colloquial; 'anywhere' is better. 'Less infection and less' is incomplete and mixes uncountable and countable nouns. Use 'less infection' and 'fewer germs' or 'less dirt'. Also punctuation—split into clearer clauses. Suggestion: use appropriate nouns after 'less'/'fewer' and complete the comparison.