整洁— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh), correct grammar (habits → habit, 'I have ADHD' without article), and give one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Mention how you try to manage the difficulty. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I do like to keep things tidy, but I find it difficult because I have ADHD. However, I try to manage this by setting short cleaning routines every evening, which helps me keep my space reasonably organized.

建議: Provide a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (mother's → mother, 'room cleanliness' is awkward), and add a specific example or reason. Use linking words (because, so) coherently and avoid repetitive phrases. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I used to keep my room tidy as a child because my mother insisted on cleanliness. As a result, I developed habits like making my bed every morning and putting toys away after playing.

× Unfortunately, it is not my, uh, strongest habits, uh, because I have an ADHD and it comes from my mother.

✓ Unfortunately, it is not one of my strongest habits because I have ADHD and it runs in my family.

Errors: article use and plural/singular consistency. 'my strongest habits' incorrectly combines singular 'it is' with plural 'habits'; correct to 'one of my strongest habits'. 'an ADHD' is incorrect because ADHD is an uncountable condition acronym; use 'ADHD' without an article. Also 'it comes from my mother' is awkward; 'runs in my family' is more natural. Suggestion: match singular/plural, omit unnecessary articles with conditions, and use natural idiomatic phrasing.

× My mother's always warned me about my room cleanliness and I got used to it, so I was trying to keep my room always tidy.

✓ My mother has always warned me about keeping my room clean, and I got used to it, so I always tried to keep my room tidy.

Multiple issues: 'My mother's always warned me' mixes contraction with tense but is acceptable as 'My mother has always warned me' (present perfect). 'room cleanliness' is a noun phrase that sounds unnatural here; use 'keeping my room clean'. 'I was trying to keep my room always tidy' has incorrect adverb placement and awkward tense for a past habit; use 'I always tried to keep my room tidy' or 'I used to try to keep my room tidy'. Suggestion: use present perfect for ongoing warnings, use natural collocations (keep/clean/tidy), place adverb 'always' before the main verb, and keep consistent past-habit tense.