整洁— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons or an example. Fix grammar (verb forms, articles) and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas. Aim for 2–4 sentences and a wider range of vocabulary (e.g. “neat,” “organized,” “tidy”).

範例: Yes — I prefer to keep things tidy. I clean my room every day and put items back in their places because clutter makes me feel uneasy. For example, I have a simple shelving system that helps me find things quickly and keeps my space organized.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence, then give a brief, specific example and contrast with the present. Correct grammatical mistakes (use ‘used to’, countable/uncountable nouns, avoid filler words). Use one linking word to show contrast (e.g. ‘however’ or ‘but’). Keep it compact (2–3 sentences).

範例: No, I didn’t used to keep my room tidy when I was a child. I often left toys and clothes everywhere, so my room was usually messy; however, I learned to be more organized as I grew older.

× That's why I always trying to keep everything in order.

✓ That's why I am always trying to keep everything in order.

The original sentence omits the auxiliary verb 'am' before the present participle 'trying'. When using present continuous with 'always' to express repeated or habitual actions (often with emotional emphasis), use a form of 'be' + verb-ing. Add 'am' to make the verb form grammatically correct.

× I clean my room every day and stay organized and if the things are messed up I feel a little bit uncomfortable with it.

✓ I clean my room every day and stay organized, and if things are messed up I feel a little uncomfortable about it.

Two issues: (1) 'the things' is unnatural here; use 'things' without the definite article. (2) 'uncomfortable with it' is less idiomatic than 'uncomfortable about it' or 'uncomfortable when that happens'. Also add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses. These changes make the sentence more natural and grammatically correct.

× always my room was messed up with a lot of stuffs, so I was simply not good at.

✓ My room was always messy and had a lot of stuff, so I simply was not good at organizing.

'Stuffs' is incorrect — 'stuff' is an uncountable noun, so use 'a lot of stuff' or 'many things'. Also the original word order 'always my room was messed up' is awkward; place 'always' before the verb or after the subject. The phrase 'not good at' needs an object or gerund (e.g., 'organizing'). Rewriting clarifies meaning and fixes plural/uncountable errors.

× When I was a child, I did not try to keep things in order.

✓ When I was a child, I did not try to keep things in order.

No grammatical correction needed for tense here; the past simple 'did not try' correctly matches the past-time context. No change required.

× in my childhood, I was not good at organizing things and uh, always my room was messed up with a lot of stuffs, so I was simply not good at.

✓ In my childhood, I was not good at organizing things; my room was always messy and had a lot of stuff, so I simply was not good at organizing.

Multiple issues: capitalization at start of sentence ('in' -> 'In'), awkward adverb placement ('always' should come before 'messy' or after subject), and repetition of 'not good at' without an object. Also replace 'messed up with' with 'messy and had'. This correction improves adjective/adverb use and sentence clarity.