视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cevabınız net ve ilgili, ancak bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve tekrarlar var. Ayrıca cümleler daha doğal akışlı ve kısa olmalı. Örneğin: fazla tekrar eden ifadelerden kaçının ('natural scenery' ve 'natural views' gibi), 'breathtaking pictures' yerine 'breathtaking' ya da 'breathtaking views' kullanın ve gereksiz sözcükleri çıkarın. Bağlaçlarla (for example, because, and) mantıklı bir akış sağlayın ve en fazla 3-4 cümlede kalın.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially natural landscapes. I find mountains and coastlines particularly breathtaking because they change with the light and weather. For example, I like taking photos at sunrise when colors are most vivid.

建議: Cevabınız doğrudan fakat biraz uzun ve tekrara yatkın. 'As I said' gibi tekrar edici ifadelerden kaçının. Cümleyi daha kısa tutup bir neden ve bir detay verin. Bağlaçlarla neden-sonuç ilişkisini belirginleştirin (because, so, therefore). Ayrıca 'green landscapes' yerine 'greenery' veya 'green spaces' daha doğal olur.

範例: I prefer rural views because they offer more greenery and untouched landscapes. For instance, small villages often have rolling fields and quiet country roads that are ideal for photography.

建議: Bu cevap fikir içeriyor ancak ifadeler hem kaba hem de gramatik olarak düzeltilmeli. 'My people don't really take care of the nature' gibi genelleştirmelerden kaçının ve daha nazik, spesifik nedenler verin. 'Garbages' yerine 'garbage' kullanın ve cümleleri parçalayarak netlik sağlayın. Örneğin, bir karşılaştırma yaparken 'in other countries' yerine 'abroad' veya 'in some other countries' deyin ve kısa bir örnek verin.

範例: I tend to prefer scenery abroad because some countries invest more in conservation and cleaner natural sites. For example, when I visited New Zealand, the beaches and parks were well maintained, which made them much more attractive for photography.

× Especially the natural scenery is breathtaking pictures for me.

✓ Especially the natural scenery is breathtaking to me.

The original uses 'pictures' incorrectly after 'breathtaking'; 'breathtaking' describes the scenery itself, not 'pictures'. Also 'the natural scenery is breathtaking to me' is a natural phrasing. Use 'to me' to express personal feeling. Suggestion: avoid adding an unnecessary noun after an adjective and use 'to me' for personal opinion.

× So when it comes to nature, I love to take pictures of the natural views.

✓ So when it comes to nature, I love taking pictures of natural views.

The original uses the infinitive 'to take' which is not incorrect but 'love taking' is more natural when describing a habitual preference. Also 'the natural views' is unnecessarily specific; 'natural views' is preferred. Suggestion: use gerund after 'love' for general habits and omit unnecessary articles.

× I prefer views of the rural areas because, as I said, I like taking pictures of the natural scenery and you cannot see a lot of green landscapes in the urban areas.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because, as I said, I like taking pictures of natural scenery and you cannot see many green landscapes in urban areas.

Use 'in rural areas' rather than 'of the rural areas' when speaking generally. 'The natural scenery' can be 'natural scenery' for general reference. Use 'many' with countable plural 'landscapes' instead of 'a lot of' for slightly more formal correctness. Drop 'the' before 'urban areas' for general statement. Suggestion: when making generalizations, omit definite articles and choose 'many' for countable nouns.

× I prefer the views of the other countries because when it comes to natural scenery, my people don't really take care of the nature, so the natural landscape is most of the time filled with garbages and doesn't look good as there are other countries.

✓ I prefer the views of other countries because when it comes to natural scenery, people in my country don't really take care of nature, so the natural landscape is usually filled with garbage and doesn't look as good as in other countries.

Several pronoun and wording issues: use 'other countries' without 'the' for general reference. 'My people' is better expressed as 'people in my country'. 'Take care of the nature' should be 'take care of nature' (no article). 'Most of the time' is better 'usually'. 'Garbages' is uncountable; use 'garbage'. The comparison 'doesn't look good as there are other countries' is incorrect; use 'doesn't look as good as in other countries' to compare properly. Suggestion: use correct collective phrasing for populations, uncountable nouns for waste, and proper comparative structure 'as...as' with a parallel clause.