视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar and fluency: use correct verb forms and articles, and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, "because" or "also"). Reduce repetition (e.g., don’t say both "fan of photography" and "I like" back-to-back).

範例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because photography helps me capture important memories. For example, I often photograph cityscapes and people when I travel, and because I am studying television production, learning to shoot good photos is useful for my coursework.

建議: Clarify and correct vocabulary; avoid repetition. Begin with a direct statement ("I prefer urban areas") and add one specific reason with a linking word like "because". Replace unclear words ("the jungle") with precise descriptions ("bustling streets" or "green parks").

範例: I prefer urban areas, especially large metropolitan cities, because I enjoy the skyline and the vibrant street life. For instance, I like photographing modern buildings and busy markets where there is always something interesting to capture.

建議: Fix major word-choice and grammar errors, and expand slightly with a clear reason. Start with a direct answer ("I prefer views in other countries") and explain specifically why, using linking words like "because" or "so". Use correct nouns ("wheels" is incorrect) and add a brief example of what you want to explore.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because I haven't traveled much and I'm curious about different landscapes and cultures. For example, I would love to photograph coastal villages, mountain scenery, and historic architecture abroad to see how they differ from places at home.

× Absolutely yes. I am a big fan of photography.

✓ Absolutely. I am a big fan of photography.

The original sentence uses 'Absolutely yes' which is unnatural; 'Absolutely' alone fits the present-tense affirmation. Remove 'yes' for idiomatic expression. Suggestion: Use 'Absolutely' or 'Yes' alone when affirming in present tense.

× I like record valuable memory through taking photo.

✓ I like to record valuable memories by taking photos.

Errors: missing 'to' infinitive or gerund form required after 'like', incorrect plural forms 'memory' and 'photo', and wrong preposition 'through'. Correct structure: 'like to record' or 'like recording'. Use plural 'memories' and 'photos', and prefer preposition 'by' to indicate method. Suggestion: Use 'I like to record valuable memories by taking photos.' or 'I like recording valuable memories by taking photos.'.

× And beside I am majoring in bone casting and television so I need to learn how to shoot photos.

✓ Also, besides that, I am majoring in bone casting and television, so I need to learn how to shoot photos.

Problems: 'And beside' is ungrammatical; use 'Also' or 'Besides'/'Besides that'. Missing comma before 'so' and awkward phrasing. Keep present continuous 'am majoring' (present tense) but improve connectors: 'Also, besides that, I am majoring...' Ensure commas for clarity. Suggestion: 'Also, I am majoring in bone casting and television, so I need to learn how to shoot photos.'.

× Absolutely city area, especially metropolitan metropolitan area because I can enjoy beautiful city skyline and the jungle.

✓ Absolutely the city area, especially the metropolitan area, because I can enjoy the beautiful city skyline and the green spaces.

Issues: missing definite article 'the' before 'city area' and 'metropolitan area', duplicated word 'metropolitan' repeated, 'city skyline' needs 'the', and 'the jungle' is odd in urban context—use 'green spaces' or 'parks'. Correct pluralization isn't main issue but articles and repetition are corrected. Suggestion: 'I prefer the city area, especially the metropolitan area, because I can enjoy the beautiful city skyline and green spaces.'.

× I would say the wheels in other country because I haven't been to many places, so I'm curious about other places landscapes and I want to explore different wheels.

✓ I would prefer the views in other countries because I haven't been to many places, so I'm curious about other landscapes and I want to explore different places.

Multiple errors: 'the wheels' is incorrect word choice—likely 'views'. 'in other country' should be 'in other countries' (plural) and needs correct preposition. 'other places landscapes' should be 'other landscapes' and 'different wheels' should be 'different places' or 'scenes'. Use 'prefer' for expressing preference. Maintain conditional present/future intent. Suggestion: 'I would prefer the views in other countries because I haven't been to many places, so I'm curious about other landscapes and want to explore different places.'.