视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting reasons. Avoid repetitions (e.g. "and also") and filler words. Use linking words like "because" and "so" to make the reasoning smoother, and give one precise example of a memorable photo to make the answer more vivid.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because photos allow me to preserve moments I can’t revisit. For example, I once photographed a sunset over a mountain range during a trip; the colours were amazing, and I still look at that photo when I want to remember the trip.

建議: Begin with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then give a clear reason and one specific example. Remove filler words ("umm", "like") and correct grammar ("the where there's too many buildings"). Limit to two or three sentences and use a linking phrase such as "because" or "although" to balance alternatives.

範例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the variety of buildings and lively streets. For example, in London I often photograph historic churches next to modern skyscrapers, which creates interesting contrasts, although I still sometimes photograph quiet countryside scenes.

建議: Answer the actual question directly (own country vs other countries) with a clear position, then explain why with one or two specific reasons. Avoid repeating words and fix grammar ("architectures" → "architecture"). Use linking words like "because" and "however" correctly to show contrast.

範例: I prefer taking photos of views in other countries because they often feature unique architecture and cultural details I don’t see at home. However, I also enjoy photographing rural scenes in my country when I travel to the countryside for a change of pace.

× I really prefer urban views because they make me feel, umm, more happy.

✓ I really prefer urban views because they make me feel happier.

'More happy' is incorrect; use the comparative form 'happier' for short adjectives instead of 'more + adjective'. Use 'happier' to compare the feeling caused by urban views to other views.

× For example, I love taking pictures of London the where there's too many buildings, but I can like the rural places places too.

✓ For example, I love taking pictures of London, where there are too many buildings, but I also like rural places.

Multiple issues: 'the where' is incorrect—use a comma + 'where' to introduce the clause. 'There's' (there is) is singular; since 'buildings' is plural, use 'there are'. 'I can like' is unnatural; use 'I also like'. Remove duplicate word 'places places'.

× I prefer urban areas because I can't take pictures of interesting architectures and the interesting buildings.

✓ I prefer urban areas because I can take pictures of interesting architecture and interesting buildings.

'Can't' contradicts context (student prefers urban areas because they can take pictures there), so change to 'can'. 'Architectures' is uncountable when referring to style or collective structures—use 'architecture' (no plural). The definite article 'the' before 'interesting buildings' is unnecessary unless specifying particular buildings; remove it.