视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve fluency by removing fillers (uh) and finish incomplete phrases. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use correct verb forms and concise phrasing to stay within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing both landscapes and cityscapes when I travel because photos help me remember special moments and share them with friends. For example, I often experiment with different angles and lighting to make each picture more interesting.

建議: Be more grammatical and specific. Start with a clear direct answer, then give two contrasted, specific reasons using linking words (for example, 'on the one hand', 'on the other hand'). Avoid vague words like 'senior' and finish your final thought. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

範例: It depends on my mood. On the one hand, I prefer urban views for their vibrant energy and interesting architecture; on the other hand, I like rural views for their calm atmosphere and natural beauty, which help me relax.

建議: Avoid fragments and incorrect phrasing. Give a direct answer, then support it with two specific reasons and a complete example. Use correct collocations (e.g., 'I love experiencing' not 'I feel love') and finish sentences. Keep concise and natural.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because they often feel more exotic and varied. I love experiencing different cultures and seeing unique architectural styles; for example, strolling through European old towns or visiting East Asian temples gives me a fresh perspective.

× I also like experience with different angles and to.

✓ I also like experimenting with different angles.

The sentence incorrectly mixes noun 'experience' and the infinitive 'to' without a verb. The verb 'like' should be followed by a gerund when describing activities (like + -ing). Use 'experimenting' to show trying different angles. Remove the stray 'to'.

× Sometimes I enjoy the energy and architecture urban views because they feel exciting,

✓ Sometimes I enjoy the energy and architecture of urban views because they feel exciting,

The phrase 'architecture urban views' is missing the preposition 'of' to link 'architecture' and 'urban views'. Use 'architecture of urban views' or reorder to 'urban architecture' to be natural.

× but other times I prefer the calm and peacefulness of senior countryside because it's helped me relax.

✓ but other times I prefer the calm and peacefulness of the countryside because it helps me relax.

'Senior countryside' is incorrect adjective choice; likely intended 'the countryside'. Also tense and verb form: 'it's helped me relax' mixes present perfect with unclear time and context; use simple present 'it helps me relax' to match general preference. Add definite article 'the countryside'.

× I like both because, uh, each offers.

✓ I like both because each offers something different.

The clause is incomplete: 'each offers' needs an object. Add 'something different' to complete the idea and make the sentence meaningful.

× I feel love experiencing different cultures and seeing unique architectural styles.

✓ I love experiencing different cultures and seeing unique architectural styles.

'I feel love' is ungrammatical. Use the simple verb 'love' to state preference in present tense. 'Feel' is unnecessary here.

× For example, if visiting European old towns or East Asia temples.

✓ For example, visiting old European towns or East Asian temples gives me a fresh perspective.

The fragment 'if visiting...' is incomplete and missing a main clause. Also adjective order and form: use 'old European towns' and 'East Asian temples'. Provide a full clause 'gives me a fresh perspective' to complete the sentence.

× I like the energy and architecture urban views because they feel exciting,

✓ I like the energy and architecture of urban views because they feel exciting,

Missing preposition 'of' and article usage: 'architecture of urban views' clarifies the relationship. Alternatively 'urban architecture' would avoid the article issue.

× Give me your fresh perspective and.

✓ They give me a fresh perspective.

The fragment 'Give me your fresh perspective and.' is incorrectly formed for the context; it appears the student meant that such visits 'give me a fresh perspective.' Use third-person plural 'they' to refer to towns/temples and complete the sentence.