视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler sounds (uh, MMM), and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep the answer to no more than five sentences and focus on clarity.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, when I travel or go on a weekend walk I always photograph landscapes that look unusual or striking. This helps me remember the place and share it with friends, so I often capture scenes at sunrise or when the light is interesting.

建議: Organize your answer into a clear topic sentence and two supporting reasons. Remove unclear phrases and fillers, and use linking words (for example, because, since, therefore). Use relevant vocabulary (e.g., countryside, skyline, pollution) and correct grammar (e.g., 'I'm an old‑school person' and 'rural settings').

範例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because countryside scenery feels peaceful and the air is fresher. For example, wide fields and mountain landscapes relax me, whereas city skylines with high buildings and traffic often feel noisy and crowded.

建議: Begin with a direct statement about preference, avoid awkward or incorrect phrases, and provide a clear reason and an example. Use linking words (for example, however, also) and keep sentences grammatically correct. Mention a foreign country example if you say you also like views abroad.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because places like Himachal Pradesh, Uttarakhand and Ladakh offer spectacular mountain scenery and cultural variety. However, I would also like to visit foreign countries such as Switzerland to see alpine landscapes and compare them with those at home.

× MMM, yes, I do like taking pictures of different views, such as when I, uh, when I go for some trip or some fun activity, whether they're my daily routine, I would definitely take pictures.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, for example when I go on a trip or do some fun activity, and even in my daily routine I definitely take pictures.

The original sentence contains tense and phrasing issues (awkward use of 'do like' and inconsistent conditional wording). Use simple present 'I like' to state a habitual preference. Replace 'go for some trip' with 'go on a trip' and 'whether they're my daily routine' with 'even in my daily routine' for clarity and correct preposition use. Also remove filler words for fluent speech.

× I'm kind of a old school person so I definitely like views in rural setting rather than in urban areas.

✓ I'm kind of an old-school person, so I definitely prefer views in rural settings rather than in urban areas.

Use the hyphenated adjective 'old-school' and the article 'an' before a vowel sound is correct but the phrase should be 'an old-school person'. Also use 'prefer' for comparisons of preference and plural 'settings' to match general reference. Include a comma before 'so' for clarity.

× Uh using urban areas with large multi Storey buildings and concrete roads.

✓ Urban areas have large multi-storey buildings and concrete roads.

The original fragment lacks a main verb and subject. Recast as a complete sentence with subject 'Urban areas' and verb 'have'. Use consistent spelling and hyphenation 'multi-storey'.

× Papa Makan PTV make me more anxious and I get worried about fresh air.

✓ Being in such places makes me more anxious and I get worried about the lack of fresh air.

The original sentence contains unclear nouns and wrong verb form 'make' for singular subject; use 'makes' to agree with singular noun phrase. Replace unclear phrase 'Papa Makan PTV' with 'being in such places' to convey meaning, and specify 'lack of fresh air' to explain the worry.

× Old.

✓ I prefer quieter, older environments.

The single word 'Old.' is a sentence fragment. Provide a complete sentence that conveys the intended meaning about preferring older, quieter places.

× As a guilty patriot eyed, we definitely love you from my country from the areas of North India such as Himachal Pradesh, Uttarakhand, Ladakh, Kashmir, the heaven of the on the earth.

✓ As a proud patriot, I definitely love my country, especially areas of North India such as Himachal Pradesh, Uttarakhand, Ladakh and Kashmir, which feel like heaven on earth.

The phrase 'guilty patriot eyed' is incorrect and unclear; use 'proud patriot'. 'We' and 'you' were misused; use 'I' and 'my country' to match the speaker. Fix article and word order: 'the heaven of the on the earth' should be 'heaven on earth'. Use commas to separate list items.

× Definitely from India first, then I would prefer foreign countries such as.

✓ I would definitely choose India first, and then I would prefer visiting foreign countries.

Maintain consistent tense and complete the comparison. 'Definitely from India first' is awkward; use 'choose India first'. Complete the sentence by adding 'visiting' and 'foreign countries' to make grammatical sense.