视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid fillers and repetitions, use one or two supporting details with linking words, and keep it under five sentences. Focus on specific reasons (e.g., composition, detail, mood) and give a short example.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures from different angles because it reveals more details and creates stronger compositions. For example, shooting from a low angle can make a building look more dramatic, while a close-up highlights texture and small features.

建議: Give a clear preference in one sentence, then support it with specific reasons and a brief example. Eliminate hesitations and unclear terms (e.g., 'PC activities'). Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to make it coherent.

範例: I prefer photographing rural areas because they offer diverse natural scenes and fewer distractions. For example, fields and old farmhouses provide authentic textures and open compositions that are hard to find in the city.

建議: State your preference clearly (own country or others) and give concrete reasons. Avoid vague phrases like 'from my friendship' and unclear wording. Use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'however') and provide a short specific example about familiarity or cultural differences.

範例: I prefer taking photos in my own country because I understand local customs and can access authentic scenes. For example, I can photograph traditional festivals where I know the best time and place to capture meaningful moments.

× To be honest, I, I take photos from different views because it will escalate, uh, various, uh, point and, and it demonstrates the subject, uh, uh, through this different views of the subject, the details of the picture is increased.

✓ To be honest, I take photos from different angles because it highlights various points and, through these different views of the subject, the details of the picture increase.

The original contains awkward word choices and agreement errors. 'Escalate' is inappropriate; 'highlight' or 'emphasize' fits better. 'Different views' should be 'different angles' or 'these different views' for clarity. 'The details of the picture is increased' has a subject-verb agreement problem: 'details' is plural, so use 'increase'. Also remove filler words and repeated hesitations to make the sentence grammatical and natural.

× As a photographer, I'd like to take pictures from uh, rural area because I can get a lot of, uh, a lot of, uh, scenario from uh, rural area, which is not present in urban area because of the PC activities and.

✓ As a photographer, I'd like to take pictures in rural areas because I can find many different scenes there that are not present in urban areas due to industrial activities.

Use 'in rural areas' not 'from rural area'; 'in' is the correct preposition for location. Use plural 'areas' and 'scenes' to match the general meaning. 'Scenario' is incorrect here; 'scenes' or 'settings' are more natural. 'PC activities' is unclear; likely 'industrial' or 'commercial activities' is intended. Also complete the sentence to avoid trailing conjunctions.

× I have to be honest, I like, I like to take picture, uh, from views from my friendship because I know the world, uh, uh, in this country and I'm able to, uh, composite the picture according to my best umm, Also, I know the details of any individual activities, uh, so it is easy for me to access.

✓ To be honest, I like to take pictures of places in my own country because I know the area well and can compose the picture to the best of my ability. Also, I know the local activities, so it is easy for me to gain access.

'Take picture from views from my friendship' is incorrect and unclear. Use 'take pictures of places in my own country' to express preference. 'Know the world in this country' is awkward; 'know the area well' is clearer. 'Composite the picture' should be 'compose the picture'. 'According to my best' is incomplete; use 'to the best of my ability'. 'Details of any individual activities' should be 'local activities'. 'Access' needs an object or 'gain access' to be grammatical.