视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Focus on clarity, correct grammar and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using correct verb forms and articles. Use linking words like “because” and “for example” correctly. Also keep the answer to under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I am a photographer and it helps me capture memories. For example, I often photograph mountains and rivers when I travel, and I keep the best shots on my phone to review later.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then contrast briefly with two clear reasons using linking words like “however” or “while”. Avoid repetition and correct singular/plural and adjective order (e.g., “modern technology”). Keep it concise.

範例: I prefer both urban and rural views because each offers something different. For instance, urban areas have modern architecture and technology, while rural areas offer peaceful rivers and mountains, so I enjoy both kinds of scenery.

建議: Open with a clear topic sentence stating preference. Use correct grammar (e.g., “my country has”, “different states have different views”) and avoid repeating the same reason. Provide one specific example of a place or feature. Keep it within five sentences.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because it has many diverse landscapes. For example, different states offer everything from historic temples to rivers and mountain ranges, so I can find varied scenery without travelling abroad.

× Yes, of course I like to clean taking pics of different view because I'm a photographer and I like to bring pics of different things like a mountains, rivers etcetera and I think it's a best way to collecting memories in a phone.

✓ Yes, of course I like taking pictures of different views because I'm a photographer and I like to capture pictures of different things like mountains, rivers, etc., and I think it's the best way to collect memories on a phone.

The original sentence misuses verb forms and articles: 'to clean taking pics' is incorrect; use 'like taking' (verb + -ing) to express preference. 'Different view' should be plural 'different views' (singular/plural). 'Bring pics' is wrong verb choice for photography; use 'capture' or 'take pictures.' 'a mountains' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'mountains.' 'a best way' needs definite article 'the best way.' 'to collecting' should be base verb 'to collect' after 'way to'. Use 'on a phone' for correct preposition. Suggestion: practise verb patterns (like + gerund), correct article use before superlatives, plural nouns, and appropriate prepositions (on a phone).

× Well, to be honest, I'd like to prefer both because in the urban areas we see a lot of technology modern things.

✓ Well, to be honest, I prefer both because in urban areas we see a lot of modern technology.

'I'd like to prefer' is an incorrect modal/verb construction; use 'I prefer' to express a general preference. 'the urban areas' is unnecessary; use 'urban areas' (article error). Word order 'technology modern things' is incorrect; use adjective 'modern' before noun 'technology' or 'modern technological things.' Suggestion: use simple present 'prefer' for general preferences, place adjectives before nouns, and avoid unnecessary articles before plural general nouns.

× But on the other hand, in the rural areas we've seen rivers, mountain, mountains, etcetera.

✓ But on the other hand, in rural areas we see rivers, mountains, etc.

Present perfect 'we've seen' is unnecessary when describing general features of rural areas; use simple present 'we see' for general truths. 'the rural areas' and 'mountain, mountains' contain article and number issues; use 'rural areas' and 'mountains.' Suggestion: use simple present for general descriptions and ensure consistent plural forms for lists.

× And that's why I prefer both.

✓ That is why I prefer both.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is informal; while not strictly ungrammatical, in this context use 'That is why' for clearer formal structure. Suggestion: avoid beginning sentences with conjunctions in formal responses and use full 'That is' for clarity.

× Here my answer is my own country because my own country have different States and every state has their different view and that's why my country is full of temples, rivers and mountains and that's why I prefer my country is the best country for different views.

✓ My answer is my own country because my country has different states and each state has different views. That is why my country is full of temples, rivers, and mountains, and I think my country is the best place for different views.

Pronoun and agreement errors: 'Here my answer is my own country' is awkward; use 'My answer is my own country.' 'my own country have' is subject-verb disagreement; 'country' (singular) takes 'has.' 'every state has their different view' mixes singular 'every' with plural pronoun 'their' and 'view' singular; use 'each state has different views' or 'every state has its own view.' Final clause 'I prefer my country is the best country' is ungrammatical; use 'I think my country is the best place.' Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement, match 'every/each' with singular determiners, and use proper sentence connectors to avoid run-on sentences.