视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more concise: start with a direct topic sentence stating you enjoy taking photos, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid hesitation words and incorrect phrases (e.g., "a will", "this guy", "future of the wheel"). Use correct verb forms and simpler vocabulary if unsure. For fluency, practice short, natural sentences and pausing to think rather than filling with "uh".

範例: Yes, I really enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, when I travel I always take my phone out to capture landscapes or cityscapes because I like to remember the places I visit. I especially enjoy photos of sunsets and unique landmarks.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and one example. Correct grammar ("I love", "rural areas", "the scenery is better") and reduce repetition. Use a linking word to connect reason and example (e.g., "because", "for example").

範例: I prefer rural areas for photography because they have more natural scenery and less crowded buildings. For example, the countryside near my hometown has rolling hills and farms which make for peaceful and colourful photos.

建議: Begin with a direct answer (e.g., "I like both, but...") then give one clear reason for preferring other countries and a brief supporting example. Fix verb forms ("I would get to take photos", "to have new experiences") and avoid vague repetition like "different places" twice.

範例: I like views in both my country and abroad, but if I had to choose I would prefer to photograph views in other countries because traveling lets me capture new cultures and landscapes. For instance, I would love to photograph the architecture and street life in a European city to compare it with scenes at home.

× Yes, I absolutely love a will, especially this guy or something like new experience of traveling.

✓ Yes, I absolutely love it, especially new experiences of traveling.

The student used incorrect words and forms. 'a will' and 'this guy or something' are not correct here. Replace with 'it' as the object of 'love' and use plural 'experiences' to match general statement. Use the gerund 'traveling' correctly as a noun phrase. Suggestion: simplify to 'I absolutely love it, especially new travel experiences.'

× I will just uh bringing my phone out and taking the future of the wheel because I love to watch it every time I uh miss it.

✓ I will just bring my phone out and take photos of the view because I love to watch it every time I miss it.

After 'will' use the base form 'bring' not the -ing form 'bringing' (Grammar problem type 8). 'Taking the future of the wheel' is incorrect wording; likely intended 'take photos of the view'. Use 'take' (base form after 'will') and 'photos of the view' as a clear noun phrase. Keep 'watch it every time I miss it.' as present simple for habitual action.

× I would say I'm love taking photos, especially in rural area or countryside in my country because, uh, in a city there has already like a lot of building, a lot of housing.

✓ I would say I love taking photos, especially in rural areas or the countryside in my country because in a city there are already a lot of buildings and a lot of housing.

Use correct verb form: 'I love' not 'I'm love' (pronoun + verb error linked to subject-verb agreement). 'Rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' or 'the countryside'. Use 'there are' not 'there has' for plural existence (There be issue, ID 3). 'Building' should be plural 'buildings'. Suggestions: 'I would say I love taking photos, especially in rural areas or the countryside, because cities already have many buildings and housing.'

× So I think rural areas areas are more green environment, the scenery are more better than in a city.

✓ So I think rural areas are greener and the scenery is better than in a city.

'More green environment' is awkward; use comparative adjective 'greener'. 'The scenery are' is incorrect: 'scenery' is uncountable singular, so use 'is'. 'More better' is redundant; use 'better' (comparative) not 'more better'. Suggestion: use correct comparative forms and subject-verb agreement: 'rural areas are greener and the scenery is better.'

× I love both of them but if I have a chance I will getting into a taking photo in another country because I want to having a new experience from other places or different places.

✓ I love both, but if I have the chance I will take photos in another country because I want to have new experiences in different places.

After 'will' use base verb 'take' not 'getting'/'a taking' (Verb + -ing form, ID 8). Use 'have the chance' not 'have a chance' for natural phrasing. Use 'have new experiences' (base verb 'have', plural 'experiences'). 'From other places or different places' is redundant; use 'in different places.' Suggestions: simplify and correct verb forms: 'if I have the chance I will take photos in another country because I want to have new experiences in different places.'

× I think that yes, I would choose from different country.

✓ I think that, yes, I would choose a different country.

'Choose from different country' has incorrect structure and missing article. Use 'choose a different country' to indicate selection (Article error and sentence structure, IDs 22 and 26). Also include article 'a' before 'different country' and remove 'from'. Suggestion: 'I think that, yes, I would choose a different country.'