视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar, sentence structure, and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct tense and prepositions, avoid redundancy, and keep within 3–4 sentences. Add one specific detail (e.g., what kinds of views you like) and use linking words such as “so” or “for example.”

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. Recently I bought an iPhone 14, so I often photograph landscapes and city skylines because the camera has high resolution. For example, I like capturing sunsets at the river near my home to share with my family.

建議: Work on fluency and removing fillers (uh, you know). Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give a clear reason and one specific example. Use linking words like “because” and “so” to connect ideas and keep it within 2–4 sentences.

範例: I prefer rural areas because they help me relax after long hours working as a software engineer. For example, I often visit a nearby countryside park to take photos of fields and trees, which helps me rest my eyes and clear my mind.

建議: Clarify meaning and correct grammar. Start with a clear statement (I prefer views in other countries), then give 1–2 specific reasons with correct sentence structure and linking words such as “because” and “for example.” Avoid repetition and filler words.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because I want to discover new landscapes and cultures. For example, since I live in a small country with limited scenic areas, I enjoy traveling abroad to photograph mountains and historic towns and to meet new people.

× Before sometimes I took some picture when I go on your place and now I recently I buy iPhone 14 with a good resolution, so I take photos to my friends, to my family.

✓ Before, sometimes I took some pictures when I went to your place, and recently I bought an iPhone 14 with a good camera, so I take photos of my friends and my family.

Multiple verb form errors: 'go' should be past 'went' to match 'took' (past tense sequence), and 'buy' should be past 'bought' because the action already happened; 'iPhone' should be capitalized and 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match 'some'; 'take photos to' is incorrect preposition use — use 'take photos of'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for past events, use correct past participle/irregular past forms, and use 'of' with 'photos'.

× When I see beautiful views, I take some picture for sightseeing too.

✓ When I see beautiful views, I take some pictures for sightseeing too.

Number agreement and noun form: 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match 'some' and general repeated action. Suggestion: use plural nouns after quantifiers like 'some'.

× When that's it.

✓ That's all.

Awkward, incomplete sentence: 'When that's it' is not a correct English phrase. 'That's all' conveys the intended meaning. Suggestion: use concise fixed expressions like 'That's all' to end a statement.

× Honestly, I prefer rural area uh, for relaxing my eyes.

✓ Honestly, I prefer rural areas, uh, to relax my eyes.

Article and number: 'rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' or preceded by 'the' if specific; 'for relaxing my eyes' is unnatural — use 'to relax my eyes'. Suggestion: use plural when speaking generally and use 'to' + verb for purpose.

× Uh, you know I am a software engineer.

✓ Uh, you know, I am a software engineer.

Minor punctuation: insert comma after 'you know' for natural flow. Grammar is otherwise correct. Suggestion: add commas around discourse markers for clarity.

× Often time uh, I am behind my laptop so when I have time I prefer to go to rural area to see the views.

✓ Often, uh, I am behind my laptop, so when I have time I prefer to go to rural areas to see the views.

Number and punctuation: 'Often time' should be 'Often' or 'Most of the time'; 'rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' when speaking generally; add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'Often' or 'Most of the time' and pluralize general nouns.

× And take some picture there and for relaxing.

✓ And take some pictures there to relax.

Preposition and noun number: 'for relaxing' is awkward; use 'to relax' to express purpose. 'picture' should be plural 'pictures'. Suggestion: use 'to' + verb for purpose and pluralize after 'some'.

× I prefer views in my in other country to discover, uh, new places in my country.

✓ I prefer views in other countries to discover new places.

Pronoun and article confusion: 'in my in other country' is ungrammatical — remove extra 'my' and use plural 'countries' if general. 'in my country' at the end contradicts the earlier phrase; simplify to 'to discover new places.' Suggestion: eliminate extra words and keep sentence concise.

× Uh, I live in uh, small, uh, country.

✓ Uh, I live in a small country.

Article and word order: missing indefinite article 'a' before 'small country'. Remove extra pauses. Suggestion: include 'a' for singular countable nouns and avoid unnecessary fillers.

× We not have uh, much uh, views for relaxing.

✓ We do not have many views for relaxing.

Negation and quantifier errors: 'We not have' should be 'We do not have'; 'much views' is incorrect — use 'many views' for countable noun 'views'. Suggestion: use auxiliary 'do' for negation in present simple and choose 'many' with countable nouns.

× So I want to discover, uh.

✓ So I want to discover new places, uh.

Incomplete thought: add the object 'new places' to complete the verb 'discover'. Suggestion: include the object of 'discover' to avoid sentence fragments.

× The new country and the new picture and to meet the new people.

✓ New countries and new places and to meet new people.

Article and noun number: 'the new country' and 'the new picture' are awkward and inconsistent; use plural 'new countries' and 'new places' to match general preference. Also use parallel structure. Suggestion: use parallel plural nouns for general preferences and avoid unnecessary 'the'.

× So that's why I prefer other.

✓ So that's why I prefer other countries.

Incomplete comparator: 'prefer other' is incomplete — specify 'other countries' or 'other places'. Suggestion: complete the object after 'prefer other' to clarify meaning.