视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural, concise and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two concrete examples with brief reasons. Avoid filler phrases like “etcetera” and repetition.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, I often photograph sunsets and close-ups of flowers because they show vibrant colours and calm details that I find relaxing.

建議: Answer directly and organize ideas with linking words. Use accurate vocabulary and avoid unclear phrasing. Give one or two specific examples and explain why you prefer them.

範例: I prefer rural views because they offer natural scenery and tranquillity. For instance, I enjoy photographing waterfalls and old country houses, as the sound of water and the rustic architecture create peaceful, picturesque scenes.

建議: Speak clearly and correct vocabulary mistakes. Give a clear preference and support it with specific details and reasons. Avoid repetition and filler words.

範例: I prefer views in my own country, especially the Himalayan region, because the dramatic mountains and clear lakes are uniquely beautiful. For example, I love photographing mountain reflections on alpine lakes during early morning light.

× To be honest, I prefer using rural areas, like in rural than there were like waterfalls, green like some girls, green views, like vintage houses. Yeah.

✓ To be honest, I prefer rural areas; in rural areas there are waterfalls, green fields, and vintage houses.

The original sentence misuses prepositions and has awkward phrasing. 'Prefer using rural areas' is incorrect; prefer takes a noun phrase, so use 'prefer rural areas'. 'Like in rural than there were' is ungrammatical — use a clear clause 'in rural areas there are'. 'Green like some girls' is a misuse of 'like' and an unclear noun; likely intended 'green fields' or 'green views'. Rephrase the sentence as a simple statement and list items with correct nouns and conjunctions. Suggestion: use 'prefer + noun', use 'in [place] there are [things]', and replace vague 'like' repetitions with commas and 'and'.

× I prefer booze in my own country, like in Himalayan areas where we can see like, pretty, pretty mountains and like lakes, yeah.

✓ I prefer places in my own country, such as the Himalayan areas, where we can see beautiful mountains and lakes.

The word 'booze' is incorrect for meaning 'places' and is likely a wrong word choice. 'Like' is overused and informal; replace with 'such as' or 'for example'. 'Pretty, pretty mountains' is informal repetition; use 'beautiful mountains'. Also 'where we can see' is fine but making the subject clear with 'places' improves grammar. Suggestion: choose correct nouns ('places' or 'areas'), avoid filler 'like', and use appropriate adjectives.