视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and use correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancies and incorrect word forms (e.g., "went" -> "visit", "break" -> remove).

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views. For example, I especially like landscapes with mountains or the ocean because the colours and natural features create dramatic, memorable images.

建議: Provide a direct topic sentence indicating your preference, then explain with a clear comparison and linking words. Avoid filler words like "uh" and be specific about what you like in each setting.

範例: I like both urban and rural views for different reasons. For instance, I enjoy mountain tops for their peaceful, wide-open scenery, while city skylines appeal to me because of their vibrant lights and tall buildings.

建議: Give a clear, confident topic sentence and support it with specific reasons. Avoid uncertain phrases like "I don't know" and correct plural/grammar errors ("a white sand beaches" -> "white-sand beaches"). Mention concrete examples or comparisons if possible.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because the Philippines has many beautiful white-sand beaches and crystal-clear waters, such as Boracay and El Nido, which offer stunning sunsets and vibrant marine life.

× I like taking photos of every view that I went, most especially on places with overlooking and have a beautiful scenery of the mountains and the oceans and break breathtaking photos or views that I want to pick.

✓ I like taking photos of every view that I visit, most especially places with an overlook and a beautiful scenery of the mountains and the ocean, which produce breathtaking shots that I want to choose.

Errors: incorrect prepositions 'of every view that I went' (use visit), 'on places with overlooking' (use places with an overlook), and 'have a beautiful scenery of the mountains and the oceans' (subject/verb and article issues corrected). Suggestion: Use correct verb for visiting locations, use 'overlook' as a noun phrase, use singular 'scenery' or 'a beautiful view', and simplify clauses to match subject-verb agreement. Use 'ocean' instead of plural when referring generally; use relative clause 'which produce' to link to 'breathtaking shots'.

× I actually like both. I want to see the view on top of the mountains and also want to see the city views of the tall malls and uh.

✓ I actually like both. I want to see the view from the top of the mountains and also the city views of the tall malls.

Errors: preposition and phrasing for location 'on top of the mountains' should be 'from the top of the mountains' to indicate vantage point. Also redundant 'want to see' removed for concision. Suggestion: Use 'from the top' when describing perspective and avoid trailing fillers like 'and uh' in formal responses.

× I haven't been to another country but I'll say the Philippines has the most beautiful views in the entire world because it has a white sand beaches and a crystal clear waters and I don't know.

✓ I haven't been to another country, but I'd say the Philippines has the most beautiful views in the world because it has white sand beaches and crystal-clear waters.

Errors: 'I'll say' is acceptable but 'I'd say' is more natural for opinion. Article errors: 'a white sand beaches' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' and pluralize correctly. 'a crystal clear waters' similar issue; use 'crystal-clear waters' without article. Redundant 'the entire' simplified to 'the'. Remove trailing filler 'I don't know'. Suggestion: Match articles to noun number, hyphenate compound adjectives, and use natural modal 'I'd say' for opinions.