视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, correct verb forms and article usage, and limit to 3–4 sentences. Use linking words if adding a reason. For example, say you prefer experiencing moments and then give one brief reason.

範例: I don't usually take photos of every view; I prefer to enjoy the moment. For example, when I visit scenic spots I focus on the experience rather than photographing everything because it helps me relax and remember the visit more vividly.

建議: Improve clarity and grammar: give a direct topic sentence then one or two specific supporting points. Correct repetition, article use, and word choice (e.g., 'green spaces', 'environmentally friendly'). Use a linking word like 'because' then a concise reason.

範例: I prefer views in rural areas because they offer more natural scenery. For instance, rural places usually have wide green spaces, clean air and fewer buildings, so I find them more peaceful and visually appealing.

建議: Provide a clear statement and correct sentence structure: start with the topic sentence ('I prefer...'), fix grammar (e.g., 'India, which is known for...'), and give one specific example of a place or landscape. Avoid unclear phrases like 'very grateful to be viewed'.

範例: I prefer the views in my own country, India, because it has diverse landscapes. For example, places like the Western Ghats and the Himalayan foothills offer dramatic mountain scenery and waterfalls that I love to visit.

× To be very honest, I'm not a person who likes to capture everything which I saw.

✓ To be very honest, I'm not a person who likes to capture everything that I see.

The original mixes past tense 'saw' with present context and uses 'which' incorrectly for people/things in restrictive clauses. Use 'that' for things and match tense: 'see' for general habit. Suggestion: use 'that I see' to indicate ongoing/habitual action.

× I'm a type of personality who likes to enjoy the live moment and being over there while watching the such breathtaking views.

✓ I'm the kind of person who likes to enjoy the live moment and be there while watching such breathtaking views.

Phrases 'type of personality' and 'being over there' are unnatural; use 'kind of person' and infinitive 'be there' after 'likes to'. Remove 'the' before 'such breathtaking views' and place 'such' before adjective phrase. Suggest using natural collocations: 'kind of person', 'enjoy the moment', 'be there'.

× Definitely in rural areas because due to urbanization the urban places do not have such views that I I admire on.

✓ Definitely in rural areas, because due to urbanization urban places do not have the kinds of views I admire.

Redundant 'I I' removed. 'Do not have' is fine but 'that I admire on' is incorrect; use 'views I admire' or 'the kinds of views I admire'. Also add comma and article 'the kinds of' for naturalness.

× Apart from that, in rural areas there are much more greenspace and other environmental friendly things on which I can admire upon.

✓ Apart from that, in rural areas there is much more green space and other environmentally friendly features that I can admire.

Use uncountable noun 'green space' (not 'greenspace') and 'much' with uncountable; change 'environmental friendly' to adverbial adjective 'environmentally friendly'. Remove redundant preposition 'upon' and use 'that I can admire' or 'which I can admire'.

× From my perspective, my own country India which is known for its breathtaking and eye-catching views.

✓ From my perspective, my own country, India, is known for its breathtaking and eye-catching views.

The original is a fragment missing a main verb. Add commas around appositive 'India' and include verb 'is' to form a complete sentence.

× The while there are several country sites which often include some waterfalls and rainforests which are very grateful to be viewed.

✓ Meanwhile, there are several countryside sites that often include waterfalls and rainforests, which are a pleasure to see.

'The while' is incorrect; use 'Meanwhile' or 'Also'. 'Country sites' should be 'countryside sites' or 'rural sites'. 'Which are very grateful to be viewed' is wrong—things are 'pleasant' or 'a pleasure to see', not 'grateful'. Use relative clauses correctly and natural collocations.