视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce repetition, use clearer topic sentence and varied vocabulary; add one specific detail and a linking word to make it coherent. Keep within 3–4 sentences and avoid filler words (umm, uh).

範例: Yes, I really enjoy photographing different views, especially skies at sunset. For example, last month I captured a vivid orange and purple sunset over the river, which looked stunning in my camera roll. I find these scenes calming and perfect for practicing composition.

建議: Make a clear contrast sentence and provide specific reasons with linking words. Avoid contradicting statements (urban not crowded) and filler sounds. Aim for 2–3 clear sentences with relevant vocabulary.

範例: I prefer urban views because the city skyline and architecture offer interesting contrasts and photo opportunities. However, for living I prefer rural areas because they are quieter and offer more open space and nature, which suits my lifestyle.

建議: Give a direct answer first, then support with specific examples. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear endings. Use linking words (for example, for instance) and mention concrete places or features.

範例: Generally, I prefer views in my own country because it offers diverse scenery. For instance, the north has dramatic mountains while the south has beautiful beaches and lush jungles, so I rarely feel the need to travel abroad just for scenery.

× Especially taking picture of skies makes me really feel good.

✓ Especially taking pictures of the sky makes me feel really good.

Use plural 'pictures' for countable noun when speaking generally (singular/plural) and 'the sky' as a general reference; 'make me feel' word order is 'makes me feel' with singular subject 'taking pictures of the sky'. Also ensure natural collocation: 'the sky' rather than 'skies'.

× And especially in this sunset, I love the view of sunset.

✓ And especially at this sunset, I love the view of the sunset.

Use preposition 'at' with events or times like a particular sunset; repeat 'the' before 'sunset' when referring to a specific sunset. Alternatively omit second 'sunset' for conciseness: 'I love the sunset.'

× I have so many pictures of different sunsets in my camera roll.

✓ I have so many pictures of different sunsets in my camera roll.

Sentence is correct regarding singular/plural; no change needed. Included here to acknowledge plural usage is correct.

× For views, I prefer urban areas because it's so umm, unique and uh, not crowded.

✓ For views, I prefer urban areas because they are unique and not crowded.

Pronoun 'it' does not agree with plural 'urban areas'. Use 'they are' for plural noun. Also avoid filler sounds in formal responses.

× But for living I prefer rural areas because it has umm umm, so more facilities.

✓ But for living I prefer rural areas because they have more facilities.

Again, 'rural areas' is plural so use 'they have' not 'it has'. 'so more' is ungrammatical; use 'more' alone. Remove filler sounds.

× It depends on what country are you talking about, but if I want to say in general, yes I am.

✓ It depends on which country you are talking about, but if I speak in general, then yes I do.

Embedded question should be 'which country you are talking about' not 'what country are you talking about'. 'If I want to say in general' is awkward; 'if I speak in general' or 'in general' is better. Use 'yes I do' to answer preference question rather than 'yes I am'. Combine clauses for natural structure.

× We have so many beautiful views in our country like in north or even in South we have a beautiful sea and beautiful jungles especially in.

✓ We have so many beautiful views in our country: in the north or even in the south we have a beautiful sea and beautiful jungles, especially in [region].

Use definite articles 'the north' and 'the south' when referring to parts of a country. Add punctuation for clarity and avoid dangling 'especially in' without finishing the phrase; specify the region or remove the fragment. Capitalization: 'south' and 'north' are lowercase when not part of proper names but with 'the' it's fine to use 'the north/the south'.