视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar, conciseness and natural word choice. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and number agreement, and provide one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words only if adding details. Avoid redundancy.

範例: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos of beautiful scenery, especially magnificent places I have visited. For example, I love capturing mountain landscapes and coastal sunsets because they show different colors and moods.

建議: Make a direct statement of preference, correct sentence structure and use specific reasons with cohesive linking. Replace vague phrases with precise descriptions and limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer urban views because cities often combine architecture and nature. For instance, I enjoy photographing riverside promenades and historic bridges surrounded by trees, which create interesting contrasts.

建議: Clarify meaning and correct tenses. Start with a clear preference, give a concise reason and an example. Avoid irrelevant or confusing statements (e.g., 'I sleep here when I was a kid'). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' appropriately.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because traveling lets me see different landscapes and cultures. For example, visiting Japan allowed me to photograph traditional gardens and modern skylines, which widened my horizons.

× My favorite hobbies is takes pictures about beautiful scenery, about magnificent place that I has traveled to.

✓ My favorite hobby is taking pictures of beautiful scenery and magnificent places that I have traveled to.

Errors: 'hobbies' vs 'hobby' and 'is' agreement; 'takes' should be gerund 'taking'; 'about' should be 'of' for pictures; 'place' should be plural 'places' to match 'beautiful scenery' and 'that I have traveled to'; 'has' should be 'have' to agree with 'I'. Suggestion: Use singular 'hobby' with 'is', use gerund after 'is', use 'of' after 'pictures', make nouns plural when referring to multiple places, and use correct auxiliary 'have' for first person.

× So to be honest I would like to see a view in urban areas because it is wide range of beautiful and it has a lot of trees, a lot of beautiful bridge in a city.

✓ To be honest, I prefer views in urban areas because there is a wide range of beautiful sights, and there are a lot of trees and beautiful bridges in a city.

Errors: 'it is wide range of beautiful' uses wrong structure and singular 'it' with plural idea; 'it has a lot of trees' is acceptable but better with 'there are' for existence; 'bridge' should be plural 'bridges'. Suggestion: Use 'there is/there are' to indicate existence, correct noun forms to plural when appropriate, and choose 'prefer' for clarity.

× So I really enjoy it.

✓ I really enjoy them.

Error: 'it' is vague and singular while referring to plural 'views' or 'urban scenes' mentioned earlier. Suggestion: Use a plural pronoun 'them' to match plural noun 'views' or repeat the noun for clarity.

× So I sleep here when I was a kid.

✓ I slept here when I was a kid.

Error: 'sleep' is present tense but the time reference 'when I was a kid' requires past tense. Suggestion: Use past simple 'slept' to match the past time frame.

× So I want to travel to other countries to enjoy a other views in their countries, to look and widen my horizons to see all the beautiful views in other countries that I have visited.

✓ I want to travel to other countries to enjoy other views there, to broaden my horizons and see the beautiful places in the countries I visit.

Errors: 'a other views' mixes an article with plural noun—should be 'other views' without 'a'; 'in their countries' is repetitive; 'widen my horizons' is acceptable but 'broaden my horizons' is more natural; tense consistency: use present/future 'visit' rather than 'have visited' if speaking of future intent. Suggestion: Remove incorrect article, avoid repetition, use consistent tense for intended travel, and choose concise phrasing.