视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer expresses clear ideas but has grammatical errors, repetition and some redundancy. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences), start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'I am' not 'As I'm' as a sentence starter), avoid repeating words (e.g., 'peaceful peacefulness'), and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., 'greenery' instead of 'greeneries').

範例: I enjoy taking photos of different views because I love traveling. For example, I often photograph mountains and forests since their natural scenery helps me relax. In addition, I sometimes capture close-up details like leaves or rock formations to remember each place.

建議: The response answers the question but has grammar problems (subject-verb agreement: 'areas are' not 'areas is'), awkward phrasing and repetition ('prefer' used twice). Make a clear topic sentence, follow with one or two specific reasons linked with connectors (e.g., 'because', 'while'). Avoid negative or vague descriptions like 'house industries'.

範例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because the countryside has more greenery and mountain scenery. For instance, I enjoy watching misty hills and quiet forests, while cities often feel noisy and crowded with buildings and factories.

建議: Your answer conveys enthusiasm but is long-winded and contains grammatical errors and unclear expressions ('travel my whole country in each places', 'take information about them'). Give a concise topic sentence stating preference, then add specific examples and a reason. Use correct verb forms and pluralization, and link ideas with connectors like 'first' and 'later' or 'for example'.

範例: I would like to explore all regions of my own country first to learn about their landscapes and cultures. Later, I hope to visit other countries such as Bali and Switzerland because their scenery—beaches and alpine lakes—is internationally famous and very attractive to me.

× As I'm so interested in traveling from one place to another place, I like to take pictures of different views like the mountains, forest and greeneries, which will provide me peaceful peacefulness and relaxation in my travelling time.

✓ Because I am very interested in traveling from one place to another, I like to take pictures of different views such as mountains, forests and greenery, which provide me with peace and relaxation while I travel.

Errors: tense and word choice. 'As I'm so interested' is informal; 'Because I am very interested' is clearer. 'Greeneries' is uncountable; use 'greenery'. 'which will provide me peaceful peacefulness' is ungrammatical and repetitive; use 'which provide me with peace and relaxation'. Use present simple 'provide' for habitual actions. Also 'travelling time' is awkward; use 'while I travel'. Suggestion: use present simple for habits, choose correct noun forms and avoid repetition.

× I prefer to view rural areas rather than the urban areas because rural areas is full of greenery and forest mountains, but urban areas is full of house industries and factories.

✓ I prefer rural areas to urban areas because rural areas are full of greenery and mountains, while urban areas are full of houses, industries and factories.

Errors: subject-verb agreement and word choice. 'Rural areas is' and 'urban areas is' are incorrect; plural subject 'areas' requires 'are'. 'Forest mountains' is awkward; 'mountains' suffices. 'House industries' is incorrect; separate 'houses' and 'industries'. Also prefer 'prefer A to B' rather than 'prefer to view A rather than B'. Suggestion: use correct plural verb forms with plural nouns and use natural noun phrases.

× So I like to prefer views of rural areas.

✓ So I prefer views of rural areas.

Error: redundant modal/verb choice. 'Like to prefer' is redundant and unnatural. Use simple present 'prefer' to express a general preference. Suggestion: avoid combining 'like' and 'prefer'; choose one verb appropriate for the meaning.

× First of all, I would like to travel my whole country in each places and take information about them and in the future if it happens I will prefer to travel in other countries like Bali, Switzerland because they are most beautiful place of the world.

✓ First of all, I would like to travel around my entire country and learn about each place, and in the future, if possible, I would like to travel to other countries such as Bali and Switzerland because they are among the most beautiful places in the world.

Multiple errors: sentence structure, article usage and plural forms. 'Travel my whole country in each places' is ungrammatical; use 'travel around my entire country' and 'each place'. 'Take information about them' is unnatural; use 'learn about each place' or 'gather information'. 'If it happens' should be 'if possible' or 'if that happens'. 'I will prefer to travel in other countries' should be 'I would like to travel to other countries'. 'They are most beautiful place' has article and plural errors; use 'they are among the most beautiful places in the world'. Suggestion: break long sentences, use correct prepositions ('travel to'), correct pluralization, and choose natural verbs like 'learn' or 'visit'.