视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers and repetition, correct grammar (e.g. "that caught my attention", "really unique" -> "quite unique"), and give one or two specific examples. Use a linking phrase if you add a reason or example.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph flowers that catch my attention, such as a bright white blossom with an unusual shape. I like capturing these moments because they are unique and memorable.

建議: Give a clear direct answer, improve sentence structure and grammar, remove repetition, and add a linking word to compare urban and rural views. Be specific about what you like in rural areas and what bothers you in cities.

範例: I prefer rural views. Living in the countryside, I enjoy the peaceful atmosphere and picturesque landscapes, such as rolling fields and quiet rivers. In contrast, urban areas are often noisy and crowded, which makes me feel stressed.

建議: Answer directly and fix grammar and word choice (e.g. "a rich variety of pagodas"). Use linking words to explain reasons and give a specific example of a place or scene you like to photograph.

範例: I prefer the views in my own country because it offers a rich variety of pagodas, parks and peaceful scenery. For instance, I often photograph the old pagodas and nearby lakes, which add color and interest to my daily life.

× Yeah, I'm quite into taking photos of everything that I came across that umm, cut attend cut my attention, umm, something like a bright white flower that really unique I haven't ever seen ever.

✓ Yeah, I'm quite into taking photos of everything that I come across that catches my attention, like a bright white flower that is really unique; I've never seen one before.

The student used 'came across' which is past tense while the general habit tense should be present 'come across' (Grammar problem type 8 and 6). Also 'cut attend cut' appears to be an attempt at 'catches my attention' requiring verb + -s for third person singular (see type 2). 'That really unique' is missing the verb 'is'. 'I haven't ever seen ever' is redundant; use 'I've never seen one before.' Suggest using present simple for habitual actions, third-person singular verb form 'catches', include linking verb 'is', and remove redundancy.

× To be honest, I live in rural areas and I really love its scenery because it because of its peace and beautiful landscapes, picturesque scenery.

✓ To be honest, I live in a rural area and I really love its scenery because of its peacefulness and beautiful landscapes.

The student wrote 'rural areas' but refers to living in one place; use singular 'a rural area' or 'the countryside'. 'Because it because of' is repetitive and ungrammatical; use 'because of'. 'Peace' should be expressed as the adjective/noun form 'peacefulness' or 'peace and beautiful landscapes.' Also removed repeated 'picturesque scenery.' Use consistent singular/plural and correct preposition 'because of' (types 1,11).

× Uh. In contrast, urban areas sometimes very bustling and make me feel like stressful.

✓ In contrast, urban areas are sometimes very bustling and make me feel stressed.

Missing third person singular form of 'to be' requires 'are' for plural 'urban areas' (type 2 and 3). 'Make me feel like stressful' is incorrect: 'feel stressed' or 'feel stressed out' is correct; 'stressful' describes something that causes stress, not the person's feeling (type 13).

× Personally, I love the views in my own country, it has reach of pagodas, parks and quiet beautiful scenery that makes my life more interesting, more beautiful and colorful.

✓ Personally, I love the views in my own country; it has a wealth of pagodas, parks, and quiet, beautiful scenery that make my life more interesting and colorful.

'Reach of pagodas' is incorrect; use 'a wealth of' or 'many' (type 14). 'Quiet beautiful scenery' needs a comma and adjective order 'quiet, beautiful scenery' (type 18). 'That makes my life' should be 'that make my life' because 'pagodas, parks, and scenery' are plural subjects influencing the verb (subject-verb agreement, type 27). Removed redundant 'more beautiful' and tightened phrasing.

× Uh, I can took photos everywhere because they are really lovely.

✓ Uh, I can take photos everywhere because they are really lovely.

The modal 'can' must be followed by the base form of the verb, so 'took' (past tense) is incorrect; use 'take' (type 4 and 5). This error is a misuse of verb tense after a modal verb. Suggest practicing modal + base verb structure (can + verb).