视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答要更自然并且条理清晰。先用一句主题句直接回答问题，然后用一到两句具体理由或例子支持。避免重复、语法错误与口头填充词（如 "as a", "uh"）。可以说明你拍照的目的（记录、练习专业技能）并给出具体场景或成果。注意时态和单复数。

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. As a journalism student, I often photograph urban scenes to practice composition and capture real-life stories. For example, last month I photographed a local market to document everyday life, which helped me improve my storytelling skills.

建議: 回答需更具体和礼貌，避免笼统或不恰当的表达（如强调“钱”）。先给出直接回答，再用一到两条具体理由支持，并用连接词（for example, because）使句子连贯。可以举例说明城市景观对你摄影的吸引点（建筑、街头生活、夜景等）。

範例: I prefer urban views because cities offer diverse subjects like architecture, street life and vibrant night scenes. For instance, I enjoy photographing skyscrapers and busy streets which give me more opportunities to capture interesting compositions and human stories.

建議: 回答要更自然并补充具体细节。先直接回答，再解释原因并给出例子。避免语法错误和模糊表达（如 "don't go very conscious"）。可以说明你更喜欢国内景色的理由（文化熟悉、拍摄便利或素材丰富），并提到一次国外或国内拍摄经历作为对比。

範例: I prefer views in my own country because I'm more familiar with the culture and locations, which helps me find meaningful stories to photograph. For example, when I photographed a traditional festival at home, I could capture authentic moments that I might have missed abroad due to language and cultural barriers.

× Firstly as a as a concern.

✓ Firstly, as a concern, ... (这句话不完整，建议补充完整意思，例如：Firstly, as a journalism student, I care about this.)

该句结构不完整且有重复词汇“as a as a”。听起来像句子开头但没有表达完整意思。建议补全句子主语和谓语，例如说明“作为新闻学专业的学生，我关心这个”以使句子完整。注意删除重复的“as a”。

× So I'm very like go to take photos and for myself, I like take the different view views because I think take videos can take photos can scratch the uh.

✓ So I really like going to take photos. For me, I like taking different views because I think taking photos and videos can record them.

原句存在动词形式和主谓搭配错误，例如“I'm very like go to take photos”应使用动名词结构“like going to”或直接“like to go”。“I like take”应为“I like taking”或“I like to take”。另外存在重复和冗余（“take the different view views”，“take videos can take photos can scratch the”），需要重写为清晰的表达如“taking photos and videos can record them”。建议使用动词+ing或不定式的正确形式，并去掉冗余词汇。

× I prefer views in urban area because I think I like, I love the big city, I love the famous, I like the rich, I love the money.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because I love big cities and famous places; I like wealth and the opportunities there.

原句“in urban area”缺少复数，且“the famous, I like the rich”用法不自然。需用复数“urban areas”或“urban areas/urban settings”。还要调整介词搭配和名词表达，使其更自然，例如“famous places”、“wealth/opportunities”。此外句子意思零碎，建议合并为连贯句子。

× So I think in urban areas I can feel myself, I can do myself.

✓ So I think in urban areas I can be myself and express myself.

原句“I can feel myself, I can do myself”用法错误，不符合英语习惯用法。应使用固定搭配“be myself”表示做自己，“express myself”表示表达自己。原句中动词与宾语搭配不当，需要改为常用表达。

× So for the views, I really like the Urban Air areas, prefer to the rural, rural areas.

✓ So for views, I really prefer urban areas to rural areas.

原句“Urban Air areas”拼写错误且结构混乱，“prefer to the rural, rural areas”重复且介词用法不当。正确结构为“prefer A to B”。去掉多余词并修正拼写。

× Uh, I prefer views in my countries.

✓ Uh, I prefer views in my country.

“my countries”不符合语境，应为单数“my country”表示说话者的国家。主谓一致和名词数正确使用应注意。

× Uh, to be honest, I don't go very conscious because I'm only Chinese and I only have some trips like Australia and the Singapore.

✓ To be honest, I don't travel very often because I'm only Chinese and I've only been to a few countries like Australia and Singapore.

原句时态和动词用法错误。“don't go very conscious”不合语法，应为“don't travel very often”。“I only have some trips like Australia and the Singapore”需要现在完成时“I've only been to a few countries like Australia and Singapore”来表示到过的经历；且“the Singapore”中不需要定冠词。建议使用正确时态和固定搭配。

× So for the other countries, I don't have so many views and options for this.

✓ So for other countries, I don't have many experiences or opportunities related to sightseeing.

原句“have so many views and options for this”表达不清，“views”用法不当（应指景色但此处含混），并且“options for this”模糊。建议改为“experiences or opportunities”来明确意思，并简化句子结构。

× I only love my.

✓ I only love my country.

原句不完整，“I only love my.”缺少宾语。应补足为“I only love my country.”以表达完整意思。