视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Shorten and clarify your response. Start with a clear topic sentence saying you enjoy taking pictures, then give one or two specific reasons using correct vocabulary and linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like “bring up background” and “different spirits of one thing.”

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I like photographing cityscapes because they show varied architecture, and I also enjoy landscapes since they capture natural light and colours.

建議: Be more concise and use grammatically correct phrases. Give one clear reason and a brief specific detail or example. Use linking words like “because” or “so” correctly and avoid repetition.

範例: I prefer urban views because I grew up in a city and feel more comfortable with its atmosphere. For instance, I enjoy photographing busy streets and modern buildings since they have more visual variety.

建議: Provide a complete, coherent sentence and a clear reason. Avoid fragmented phrases and unclear vocabulary like “substitute in this cultural variance.” Give a specific example of what appeals to you about your country’s views and use a linking word such as “because” or “so.”

範例: I prefer views in my own country because I am familiar with the culture and landscapes. For example, local festivals and traditional architecture make photographs more meaningful to me.

× Yes I do. I like photographing very much.

✓ Yes, I do. I like photographing very much.

Add a comma after the introductory 'Yes' for correct punctuation and natural rhythm. This is a punctuation issue affecting adverbial placement rather than word choice; the sentence is otherwise grammatically correct.

× Different views means we have different bring up background and different spirits of one thing.

✓ Different views mean we have different backgrounds and different perspectives on the same thing.

The noun phrase 'different views' is plural so the verb should be 'mean' (subject-verb agreement). 'Bring up background' is incorrect word order and word choice; use 'backgrounds' or 'upbringing' and pluralize to match 'different'. 'Different spirits of one thing' is unnatural; 'different perspectives on the same thing' is clear and idiomatic.

× I prefer urban areas, you know, because I was born in the urban areas and bring up in the urban atmosphere and urban, urban views is more suitable for me.

✓ I prefer urban areas, you know, because I was born and brought up in an urban environment, and urban views are more suitable for me.

Multiple issues: 'bring up' is incorrect; the correct past participle is 'brought up' (past tense/past participle) so use 'was born and brought up'. 'the urban areas' is awkward; 'an urban environment' or 'urban areas' without 'the' is better. 'urban, urban views is' has subject-verb disagreement: 'views are' (plural). This correction addresses singular/plural and tense problems and improves word choice and fluency.

× I prefer using my own country definitely because I was born in my country and I totally. Substitute in this cultural variance.

✓ I definitely prefer my own country because I was born there and I am completely familiar with its cultural differences.

The original has sentence fragments and incorrect verbs: 'I totally. Substitute in this cultural variance.' is ungrammatical. Replace with a coherent clause: 'I am completely familiar with its cultural differences.' Use 'born there' to avoid repetition and 'definitely' before the verb for natural emphasis. This fixes sentence structure and clarity.