视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, umm), use correct vocabulary (views, nature), and keep to 2–4 supporting sentences. Include a brief reason and an example using linking words (for example, because, so). Focus on correct grammar (e.g., plural/singular, verb forms) and coherent phrasing.

範例: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy photographing natural landscapes because they change with the light and seasons. For example, I like to capture sunsets over lakes so I can share the colors and mood with my family. This helps me preserve memories and show others what I experienced.

建議: Answer directly and use clearer comparative language. Begin with a topic sentence stating your preference, then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (because, whereas, for example). Use correct nouns and avoid invented words. Keep sentences concise and grammatical.

範例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because the countryside offers quieter, more varied natural scenery. For example, you can photograph fields, forests and wildlife there, whereas cities mostly have buildings and traffic noise. Therefore, I find rural views more relaxing and photogenic.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence stating your preference and support it with one or two specific reasons and an example. Avoid vague or incorrect phrases (e.g., "wheel", "red tracking"); use precise vocabulary like "landscapes", "coastlines", "picturesque". Use linking words (for example, because) and correct sentence structure.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because travelling lets me see different landscapes and cultures. For example, when I visited Australia I loved the coastal scenery and clear beaches near the city, which were very picturesque. Seeing places abroad inspires me and gives me new ideas for photography.

× Personally, I say I love taking pictures, uh, in different wheels, especially for, uh, nature's will because I feel like most of nature is backtracking.

✓ Personally, I would say I love taking pictures of different views, especially of nature, because I feel like much of nature is breathtaking.

The student used incorrect words: 'wheels' and 'will' instead of 'views' and 'nature', and 'backtracking' instead of 'breathtaking'. This is a word choice/usage issue classified under incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs (13). Also 'I say' is unnatural; 'I would say' is better. Suggestion: learn and use correct vocabulary ('views', 'breathtaking') and common phrases ('I would say', 'pictures of').

× So I would love to capture that moment so I can, umm, explain that to my friend and my families who I love, umm, after I came.

✓ So I would love to capture those moments so I can show them to my friends and family after I return.

Errors: pluralization and pronoun/noun choice ('that moment' vs 'those moments'), incorrect plural 'my families', awkward phrase 'who I love' and wrong tense 'after I came'. Classified as incorrect use of pronouns (12) and also plural issue (1). Suggestion: use 'friends and family' (family is uncountable here), match singular/plural, use 'show' rather than 'explain' for photos, and use correct tense 'after I return'.

× I prefer a will personally in Lulu areas.

✓ I prefer rural areas personally.

Original has misused words 'a will' and 'Lulu' likely intended 'rural', and incorrect article. This fits article errors (22) and word choice/adjective issues (13). Suggestion: remove unnecessary article and use correct word order: 'I prefer rural areas personally.'

× I feel like rural areas offer you some things more explained than just in urban area.

✓ I feel like rural areas offer more than urban areas.

Awkward phrasing 'offer you some things more explained' and missing article 'an urban area' or plural 'urban areas'. Classified as incorrect use of articles (22) and sentence structure (26). Suggestion: simplify to 'offer more than urban areas' or 'offer things that are more peaceful than in urban areas.'

× Urban area mostly focus on cities.

✓ Urban areas mostly focus on cities.

Subject-verb agreement/plural: 'Urban area' should be plural 'Urban areas' to match 'mostly focus'. Classified as singular and plural issue (1) and subject-verb agreement (27). Suggestion: use plural nouns when speaking generally: 'Urban areas mostly focus on cities.'

× However in rural areas they do have a lot of livings, a lot of natures I feel like.

✓ However, in rural areas they do have a lot of wildlife and natural scenery, I feel.

'Livings' and 'natures' are incorrect word forms; use 'wildlife' and 'natural scenery' or 'nature'. Classified as incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs (13) and plural issue (1). Suggestion: learn countable/uncountable nouns and preferred collocations: 'a lot of wildlife' or 'much nature'.

× Absolutely. Another countries.

✓ Absolutely. Other countries.

'Another countries' mixes singular 'another' with plural 'countries'. Classified as article errors/quantifier issues (22/14). Suggestion: use 'other countries' for plural, 'another country' for singular.

× I went to Australia before.

✓ I have been to Australia before.

Both 'I went to Australia before' and 'I have been to Australia before' can be correct; present perfect 'have been' is more natural when relating past experience to present. Classified as past tense issue (5). Suggestion: use present perfect for life experiences: 'I have been to Australia before.'

× I feel like the wheel in Australia, it's red tracking.

✓ I feel like the landscape in Australia is red and dramatic.

'Wheel' and 'red tracking' are incorrect words; likely meant 'landscape' and 'red, striking' or 'red terrain'. Classified as incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs (13) and sentence structure (26). Suggestion: use accurate vocabulary: 'landscape', 'red', 'dramatic', 'striking'.

× It's like picturesque Will since the city itself located nearby the seas.

✓ It's picturesque since the city itself is located near the sea.

Errors: stray 'Will', missing verb 'is', incorrect preposition 'nearby the seas' should be 'near the sea'. Classified as sentence structure errors (26) and incorrect use of prepositions (11) and article errors (22). Suggestion: include the verb 'is', use singular/plural correctly, and say 'near the sea' or 'near the coast.'

× Umm yeah, we can oversee the seashores from our cities, so I think.

✓ We can see the seashore from the city, so I think that's nice.

'Oversee the seashores' is awkward; 'see the seashore' or 'view the coastline' is better. Also incomplete clause 'so I think.' Classified as incorrect use of verbs (-ing/present participle not primary) but mainly sentence structure (26) and word choice (13). Suggestion: use 'see' or 'view' and complete the thought: 'so I think that's nice' or 'so I think it's beautiful.'