视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition, use correct nouns, and give one or two specific examples with brief reasons. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use linking words like “for example” and “because.” Also correct pronunciation and grammar (e.g., “pictures,” “memories”).

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph coastal sunsets and mountain ridges because their colors and shapes are memorable. I do this to preserve the memory and to share the scenes with friends.

建議: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and specific supporting details. Use linking words like “because” and give a concrete example of what you capture (e.g., fields, rivers) and how it makes you feel. Limit to 2–4 sentences and avoid filler words (“uh”).

範例: I prefer rural areas because they offer unspoiled natural scenes. For example, I like photographing farmland and rivers since the colors and textures are calming, and looking back at the photos helps me relax.

建議: Give a concise comparison with a clear preference and specific reasons. Start with a topic sentence (e.g., “I prefer…”) then support it with one or two specific details such as examples of cultural scenes or architectural features. Avoid repetition and hesitations.

範例: I like both, but I prefer photographing scenes in my own country. For example, local festivals and traditional buildings fascinate me because they reflect unique cultural details and architectural styles that I can’t find elsewhere.

× Yes, I like taking picture of different views, for example the wheel of the sea, the wheel of the mountain, the wheel of the forest.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, for example the wheel of the sea, the wheel of the mountain, and the wheel of the forest.

The noun 'picture' should be plural because the speaker refers to taking multiple photographs. Use 'pictures' to match plural 'different views'. Also add 'and' before the last item in a list for clarity.

× Because I like to mem memorize the wheel that I have seen not only in my memory but only at the.

✓ I like to remember the scenes I have seen, not just in my memory but also in photographs.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains repetitions and incorrect words ('mem memorize', 'wheel' used oddly, 'only at the.'). Recast the idea: 'remember the scenes I have seen' and contrast 'not just in my memory but also in photographs'. This fixes sentence structure and meaning.

× Actually, I prefer the rural area will uh, because there are a nature scene so I can capture the thing that is really natural and it made me feel relaxed to looking back.

✓ Actually, I prefer rural areas because there are natural scenes so I can capture things that are truly natural, and they make me feel relaxed when I look back.

Multiple article and noun errors: 'the rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' to match general preference; 'a nature scene' should be 'natural scenes' (adjective form and plural); 'the thing' should be 'things' plural and 'really' -> 'truly' or 'really' as adverb; tense consistency: 'it made me feel' should be present 'they make me feel' to match ongoing preference; 'to looking back' incorrect gerund form and preposition, use 'when I look back'. These corrections fix articles, noun forms, adjective use, and tense.

× Actually, I like both of them. However, taking a picture of the the different culture of my own is tempting me because I like to see the different cultures and the different architecture.

✓ Actually, I like both. However, taking pictures of the different cultures in my own country is more tempting because I like to see different cultures and different architecture.

Article and noun issues: remove duplicated 'the the'; 'taking a picture of the the different culture of my own' is incorrect—use plural 'pictures' and 'cultures' and specify 'in my own country'. 'Tempting me' is unnatural in this context; 'is more tempting' compares preferences. This corrects article use and pluralization.

× So I like to I, I, I like it more.

✓ So I like that more.

The original contains disfluent repetition common in speech. For a clear sentence, condense to 'So I like that more.' This fixes redundancy and produces a grammatical, concise response.