视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ваш ответ понятен и выразителен, но есть несколько моментов для улучшения: 1) Сократите повторения и постарайтесь дать более структурированный ответ: начните с прямого утверждения, затем добавьте одно-два конкретных примера. 2) Исправьте грамматические ошибки и неверные фразы (например, «what are you taking a picture?» и «you be happy»). 3) Используйте связующие слова (for example, because, so) для логичности. 4) Поддерживайте естественную длину — не более 4–5 предложений.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography is my hobby. For example, I often photograph sunsets and interesting architecture because they help me remember special moments. Also, I save the best shots in my gallery so I can look back and feel happy. Overall, taking pictures makes ordinary scenes feel more meaningful.

建議: Ответ откровенный, но звучит неуверенно и расплывчато. Рекомендации: 1) Сначала коротко ответьте на вопрос (prefer urban/rural/both) — это важно для структуры. 2) Затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных аргумента или примера, используя связки (for instance, because). 3) Избегайте фраз о незнании терминов — экспертный экзаменатор ожидает понимания базовых слов; вместо этого можно объяснить значение. 4) Поправьте грамматику и завершайте предложения четко.

範例: I prefer both urban and rural views because each offers something different. For instance, urban areas have fascinating architecture and vibrant street scenes, while rural places offer peaceful lakes and mountains. I especially love photographing sunsets in both settings because they create beautiful colors and moods.

建議: Ответ неубедителен из‑за путаницы и неясных выражений (например, «puff views») и противоречивых заявлений. Рекомендации: 1) Дайте прямой ответ (my country / other countries / both) и объясните причину. 2) Избегайте заполнителей (uh, umm) и повторов. 3) Если у вас нет опыта путешествий, скажите об этом коротко и приведите причины, почему вы цените виды дома. 4) Используйте конкретные детали — например, типичную природу или архитектуру вашей страны.

範例: I prefer the views in my own country because I know its landscapes well and they have a special meaning to me. Although I haven't travelled abroad yet, I appreciate our mountains, lakes and historic buildings, which are lovely to photograph. Someday I hope to visit other countries and compare their scenery with what I have at home.

× Of course, taking pictures is my hobby.

✓ Of course, taking pictures is my hobby.

The sentence is correct. 'Taking' is used properly as a gerund (present participle functioning as a noun) to describe the hobby.

× When I see anything aesthetic or beautiful, I always take a picture.

✓ When I see anything aesthetic or beautiful, I always take a picture.

The sentence is correct. 'Seeing' is not required; 'When I see' uses present simple correctly to indicate habitual action.

× My friends say, why? What are you taking a picture? Everything you see.

✓ My friends ask, 'Why are you taking a picture of everything you see?'.

Original had incorrect question word order and fragmented clauses. Use 'ask' to report their question and correct auxiliary inversion 'are you taking' for direct question form; include object 'of everything you see' to complete meaning.

× But I think that's so important.

✓ But I think that's very important.

Grammatically fine; stylistic improvement: 'very' is more natural than 'so' in this context. No structural change needed.

× That's a memory that you should keep in your gallery, and every time you see it, you be happy.

✓ That's a memory that you should keep in your gallery, and every time you see it, you will be happy.

Original uses incorrect verb form 'be' after subject 'you'. For future-in-general effect use 'will be' to express the result when seeing the memory; could also use 'are happy' for general truth. This fixes subject-verb agreement and tense.

× 'Cause I don't know what means urban or rural areas, I can't answer to this question.

✓ Because I don't know what 'urban' or 'rural' means, I can't answer this question.

Use 'Because' instead of informal ''Cause' and correct word order 'what ... means'. Also remove unnecessary preposition 'to' after 'answer'. Put 'urban' and 'rural' in quotes or italics in speech; maintain singular 'means' because the clause 'what ... means' is singular.

× But I prefer every view.

✓ But I like all kinds of views.

'Prefer every view' is unnatural; 'prefer' typically needs a comparison or object. 'I like all kinds of views' conveys intended meaning clearly.

× The view of lake, the mountains, the architecture, the sunsets.

✓ The view of the lake, the mountains, the architecture, and the sunsets.

Add definite article 'the' before 'lake' and include 'and' before the last item in the list for correct coordination. Use commas consistently.

× I like sunsets very much.

✓ I like sunsets very much.

This sentence is correct and appropriately expresses preference.

× That's my I don't know how to describe my feelings when I see sunsets and I take pictures every.

✓ I don't know how to describe my feelings when I see sunsets; I take pictures every time.

Original is fragmented and missing words. Remove extraneous 'That's my', add 'time' after 'every', and separate into two clauses with a semicolon for clarity. This fixes sentence structure and completes the idea.

× I like puff views 'cause my country is so beautiful too, but the other countries are more beautiful.

✓ I like the views of my country because it is also beautiful, but other countries can be even more beautiful.

'Puff views' is unclear—assume meaning 'the views of my country'. Use 'because' not ''cause', correct pronoun 'it' to refer to 'my country', and adjust comparative phrase to 'can be even more beautiful' for natural expression.

× I think uh, I have never been to uh, other countries.

✓ I think I have never been to other countries.

Remove filler 'uh' for clarity. The present perfect 'have never been' is correct to express experience up to now. No tense change required.

× So, umm, now I will answer that I like my own country's views.

✓ So now I will say that I like the views of my own country.

Remove filler 'umm', and use 'say that' instead of 'answer that' for natural phrasing. Use 'the views of my own country' for clear noun phrase structure.