视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản, phát âm và tính tự nhiên. Tránh lỗi như 'photo' -> 'photos' hoặc 'a photo', 'last night vacation' nên là 'last vacation' hoặc 'on my last vacation'. Dùng cấu trúc câu rõ ràng: trả lời trực tiếp, sau đó thêm 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể về nơi chụp, thiết bị hoặc cảm xúc. Hạn chế tiếng lắp (uh) và dùng linking words (for example, such as, because) để mạch lạc. Giữ tối đa 4-5 câu.

範例: Yes, I love taking photos of beautiful scenery. On my last vacation to Singapore with my family, I photographed the city skyline, gardens and local people. For example, the Gardens by the Bay had amazing light displays that were perfect for night shots. I usually use a small mirrorless camera because it's easy to carry around.

建議: Cải thiện từ vựng và cấu trúc so sánh, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ và dùng linking words đúng cách. Thay các từ viết hoa không cần thiết và sửa các cụm sai (ví dụ: 'I refer you in' -> 'I prefer', 'Greenfield' -> 'green fields', 'Like in contract' -> 'in contrast'). Bổ sung một câu cụ thể minh họa vì sao nông thôn thư giãn hơn (âm thanh, không khí, không gian). Giữ 3-4 câu mạch lạc.

範例: I prefer views in rural areas because green fields, mountains and rivers help me feel relaxed and peaceful. For example, the quiet countryside lets me enjoy bird song and fresh air, which is a nice escape from the noisy, crowded city. In contrast, urban views often feel hectic and stressful.

建議: Sửa lỗi nội dung và sự chính xác địa danh, ngữ pháp và từ vựng. Tránh nhầm lẫn (Halong Bay, Sapa, not 'Halal Bay' or 'Sabah' if meaning Sapa). Câu trả lời nên bắt đầu trực tiếp (I prefer...), giải thích lý do cụ thể, và nêu một ví dụ trong nước và một ngoại quốc. Tránh các từ không chính xác như 'prayers' hoặc 'bliss' nếu ý muốn nói 'places' hoặc 'beauty'. Dùng linking words (for example, however) để liên kết ý rõ ràng.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because Vietnam has diverse landscapes like Ha Long Bay and Sapa, which are famous for their stunning scenery. For example, Ha Long Bay's limestone islands are breathtaking and easy to explore by boat. However, I also admire places abroad such as Mount Fuji in Japan and the lavender fields in France, and I hope to visit them one day.

× I love taking photo of beautiful scenery.

✓ I love taking photos of beautiful scenery.

Use the plural 'photos' because 'taking' implies multiple pictures; 'photo' should be plural to match the activity. Use 'photos' to indicate countable items.

× During last night vacation, I traveled to Singapore with my family.

✓ During last night's vacation, I traveled to Singapore with my family.

Use the possessive form 'last night's' to show the vacation belongs to last night. The past simple 'traveled' is correct; only the noun phrase needed correction.

× I took uh city view, gardens, trees and people.

✓ I took city views, gardens, trees, and people.

Use plural 'views' to match multiple scenes; no article is needed before a list of things. Add commas and 'and' for correct list punctuation. Also remove filler 'uh'.

× Photography allows me keep memorize.

✓ Photography helps me remember things.

Original sentence mixes incorrect verbs. Use 'help' + base verb 'remember' or 'allows me to keep memories' but simplest: 'helps me remember things.' This fixes verb form and sentence structure.

× In my opinion, I refer you in rural areas.

✓ In my opinion, I prefer rural areas.

'Refer you' is incorrect here; the intended verb is 'prefer' to express choice. Also remove 'in' after 'prefer' and 'you' which is unnecessary.

× I love seeing Greenfield, mountain, rivers and a lot of trees because they make me feel relaxed, peaceful and escape from the city.

✓ I love seeing green fields, mountains, rivers, and lots of trees because they make me feel relaxed and peaceful and help me escape from the city.

Use plural forms for countable nouns (green fields, mountains, rivers). Use 'lots of' instead of 'a lot of' before nouns for natural phrasing. Add 'help me' before 'escape' to make the verb parallel and grammatically correct.

× Like in contract. Urban area is so crowded, noisy so I don't enjoy the view as much.

✓ In contrast, urban areas are so crowded and noisy, so I don't enjoy the view as much.

Use 'in contrast' to signal comparison. Use plural 'urban areas' to match general statement. Add 'and' between adjectives and a comma before 'so' for clarity.

× I prefer view in my own country because Vietnam has many prayers taking place.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because Vietnam has many places of worship where prayers take place.

'View' should be plural 'views'. 'Many prayers taking place' is awkward; use 'places of worship where prayers take place' to express locations and events correctly.

× For example, Halal Bay and Sabah are were famous and offer stunning scenery.

✓ For example, Ha Long Bay and Sabah are well known and offer stunning scenery.

Correct the place name to 'Ha Long Bay'. Remove redundant 'were' and use 'are well known' for present-state description. 'Well known' is natural for fame.

× However, I also admire sight abroad such as mountain Fuji in Japan and the lavender fields in France.

✓ However, I also admire sights abroad such as Mount Fuji in Japan and the lavender fields in France.

Use plural 'sights' for multiple attractions. Use the standard name 'Mount Fuji' with capitalization and correct word order.

× There are so many beautiful bliss to explore, so I hope I can visit them.

✓ There are so many beautiful places to explore, so I hope I can visit them.

Replace incorrect noun 'bliss' with 'places' which fits context. 'Beautiful places' is the appropriate phrase to describe locations to explore.