视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, you know), and limit to 3–4 sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and give a specific example to make your answer more vivid.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing views, especially skies at sunrise and sunset because they feel hopeful and beautiful. For example, last month I photographed a sunrise over the river, and the soft light made the scene feel nostalgic. I also like capturing flowers and family interactions because they show close-up details and emotions.

建議: Provide a direct topic sentence and support it with specific reasons using clear linking words. Remove hesitation and correct small grammar mistakes (e.g., "I want"). Give one concise example to support your preference.

範例: I prefer rural views because they offer natural skies and rivers that are ideal for photography. For instance, I often visit a nearby village where the morning mist over the river creates dramatic photos. Moreover, rural scenes feel more authentic and peaceful, which I try to capture in my pictures.

建議: Answer directly and avoid vague or disjointed comments. Use linking words to explain reasons and give a specific, coherent example about the documentary and why it influenced you. Avoid repeating single words like "awestruck."

範例: Although I love my country, I would prefer photographing views in other countries because I want to see different landscapes. For example, after watching a documentary about Croatia, I was impressed by its coastline and thought it would be amazing to capture those turquoise waters and historic towns. Seeing different natural settings would broaden my photographic style and inspiration.

× I like taking pictures of views, especially the sky, uh, during down and dusk.

✓ I like taking pictures of views, especially the sky, at dawn and dusk.

The phrase 'during down' is incorrect. The correct preposition for specific times of day is 'at' and the noun is 'dawn' not 'down'. Use 'at dawn and dusk' for times when the sky is visually striking. Suggestion: Replace 'during down' with 'at dawn' and keep 'dusk' with 'at' implied (at dawn and dusk).

× Uh, sunrise for me represents hope and that you can change that.

✓ Sunrise for me represents hope and the possibility of change.

The original sentence is awkward and uses 'that you can change that' which is unclear and ungrammatical. Replace with a noun phrase 'the possibility of change' to express the intended meaning clearly. Suggestion: Use concise noun phrases to express abstract ideas (e.g., 'the possibility of change').

× And since it is, it's beautiful.

✓ And since it is beautiful,

The clause is redundant and punctuated awkwardly. Combine phrases into a single dependent clause 'And since it is beautiful,' so the sentence can continue. Ensure pronoun 'it' clearly refers to 'sunrise' or 'the sky'. Suggestion: Combine fragmented clauses and ensure pronouns have clear antecedents.

× It's kind of give me nostalgia.

✓ It kind of gives me nostalgia.

Subject-verb agreement and verb form are incorrect: 'give' should be 'gives' to agree with singular subject 'it'. Also 'It kind of gives me nostalgia' is the correct structure. Suggestion: Use third person singular verb forms with singular subjects ('it gives').

× So I like taking pictures of those scenes.

✓ So I like taking pictures of those scenes.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Included for completeness. Suggestion: None.

× The other thing is I also love taking pictures of flowers, uh, rivers.

✓ I also love taking pictures of flowers and rivers.

Using 'The other thing is' and 'also' together is redundant and 'flowers, uh, rivers' is disfluent. Combine items with 'and' for natural listing. Suggestion: Use 'and' to join listed nouns and avoid redundant introductory phrases.

× And also, uh yeah, humans like interacting family and family gathering.

✓ And also, I like photographing people interacting with family and family gatherings.

'Humans like interacting family' is ungrammatical; pronoun and verb use incorrect. Clarify subject 'I' and use gerund or verb 'photographing' to match 'taking pictures'. Use 'people interacting with family' or 'family gatherings'. Suggestion: Use clear subjects and parallel noun phrases when listing interests.

× I 100% prefer views of urban, no, no, I mean rural areas because as I said, I enjoy, uh, the sky, rivers, those things and those things are found mainly in rural areas.

✓ I prefer rural views because, as I said, I enjoy the sky, rivers, and similar scenes, which are mainly found in rural areas.

'Views of urban' is incomplete (should be 'urban areas') and '100%' is unnecessary in formal speech. Repetition 'those things' is vague; replace with 'similar scenes'. Ensure relative clause 'which are mainly found in rural areas' correctly modifies the noun. Suggestion: Use precise nouns, avoid fillers and repetitions, and structure relative clauses to clearly modify the intended noun.

× And I not only that, I think there is authenticity to rural life.

✓ Not only that, but I think there is an authenticity to rural life.

The original sentence omits auxiliary and uses incorrect word order. Use 'Not only that, but...' to introduce an additional point. Add indefinite article 'an' before 'authenticity'. Suggestion: Use standard conjunction patterns ('Not only... but...') and include articles where required.

× Uh, that I wanna have for.

✓ that I want to have.

Phrase 'for' at the end is unnecessary and informal 'wanna' should be 'want to'. Remove 'for' and use 'want to have' to complete the clause. Suggestion: Avoid informal contractions in formal responses and ensure verbs are not stranded with extra prepositions.

× So for that reach reason, I like capturing, uh, views from rural areas.

✓ So for that reason, I like capturing views of rural areas.

'Reach' is incorrect here; likely intended 'reason'. Remove filler 'uh' and use 'views of rural areas' or 'views from rural areas' consistently. Simplify phrasing. Suggestion: Proofread for word choice errors and remove fillers for clarity.

× I love my country but I think I would prefer views from other countries.

✓ I love my country, but I think I would prefer views from other countries.

This sentence is correct grammatically; only punctuation added. Comma before 'but' improves readability. Suggestion: Use commas before coordinating conjunctions joining independent clauses.

× Like yesterday I was watching a documentary where this guy was traveling around Croatia and it's so beautiful, it's breathtaking.

✓ Yesterday I was watching a documentary about a man traveling around Croatia, and it was so beautiful; it was breathtaking.

Mixing tenses and pronouns: the documentary viewing is past ('was watching'), so descriptions should be past ('it was'). 'This guy' is informal; 'a man' is more appropriate. Use consistent past tense. Suggestion: Maintain consistent tense across related clauses and prefer neutral vocabulary in responses.

× Awestruck.

✓ I was awestruck.

Single-word fragment 'Awestruck.' lacks a subject and verb. Use full clause 'I was awestruck' to complete the sentence. Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments; include subject and verb.

× I was awestruck and it looks like a paradise and it made me wonder.

✓ I was awestruck; it looked like a paradise, and it made me wonder why I favor some places over others.

Mixed tenses: 'was awestruck' (past) then 'looks' (present) should be 'looked' to match past. Also sentence is incomplete; add object 'why I favor some places over others' to clarify what was wondered. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and clarify dependent clauses.

× Your favor some places over others because there are other people where it is completely desert.

✓ You favor some places over others because some places are completely desert.

'Your' is incorrect possessive; should be 'you'. 'There are other people where it is completely desert' is ungrammatical and confusing. Clarify as 'some places are completely desert' to explain contrast. Suggestion: Use correct pronouns and rephrase to express comparisons about places rather than people.

× And yeah, I would like to visit places full of nature.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit places full of nature.

'And yeah' is informal; replace with 'Yes' for clarity. Grammar is otherwise fine. Suggestion: Use clearer discourse markers in formal speaking and avoid filler words.