视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix prepositions and pluralization.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, over the past four years I have travelled for work and taken photos of rural villages, urban skylines, mountains and beaches. I often revisit these pictures to remember the places and improve my composition.

建議: Provide a clear direct answer then give specific reasons with linking words. Avoid unfinished sentences and vague phrases. Use correct articles and plural forms (e.g., "urban areas", "rural areas").

範例: I prefer views in rural areas because I grew up in urban areas and am used to the city scene. Therefore, rural landscapes feel fresher and more peaceful; for instance, I enjoy the wide fields, traditional houses and quieter streets which offer more interesting photo opportunities.

建議: Expand the short answer with a brief reason and an example. Use a topic sentence plus one supporting detail to meet the Natural & Effective and Basic Structure rules.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because they often offer different cultures and scenery. For example, when I visited Japan I was struck by the contrast between modern architecture and traditional gardens, which inspired me to take many unique photos.

× Yeah, I do like taking pictures on different views.

✓ Yeah, I do like taking pictures of different views.

The verb 'take pictures of' is the correct collocation; 'on different views' is incorrect preposition use. Use 'of' to indicate the object being photographed. Suggestion: learn common verb+noun collocations (e.g., take pictures of, look at).

× I have travelled a lot in the past four, four years because of my work and I've taken several pictures and rural, urban, mountains, beaches and I do like to go back into my photos.

✓ I have travelled a lot in the past four years because of my work, and I've taken several pictures of rural and urban areas, mountains, and beaches, and I like to look back at my photos.

Redundant repetition ('four, four'), missing prepositions and incorrect phrase 'go back into my photos.' Use present perfect 'have travelled' is fine for past experiences up to now. Add 'of' after 'pictures' and correct list punctuation; use 'look back at' instead of 'go back into.' Suggestion: simplify long sentences, check collocations (pictures of, look back at) and remove repeated words.

× I think I prefer views more in the rural areas because I have always been in urban area.

✓ I think I prefer views more in rural areas because I have always been in urban areas.

Incorrect article use: 'in urban area' should be plural 'in urban areas' or 'in the urban area.' Here plural matches contrast with 'rural areas.' Also 'the rural areas' is not necessary; use 'in rural areas.' Suggestion: pay attention to article and singular/plural when comparing general categories.

× I kind of grew up in that area, so I know what goes around and what to anticipate.

✓ I kind of grew up in that area, so I know what goes on and what to anticipate.

Phrase 'what goes around' is incorrect; correct idiom is 'what goes on' meaning what happens. 'Grew up' (simple past) is correct for a completed action. Suggestion: learn common idiomatic expressions such as 'what goes on.'

× But the views, the people and the places that we see in rural area are so.

✓ But the views, people, and places that we see in rural areas are beautiful.

Sentence is incomplete and missing a descriptive adjective after 'so.' Also 'rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' to match earlier usage. Suggestion: complete the sentence with an adjective (e.g., beautiful, charming) and ensure noun phrases agree in number.

× In other countries.

✓ I prefer views in other countries.

Fragment: 'In other countries.' lacks a subject and verb. Provide a full sentence to answer the question clearly and match tense/style of conversation. Suggestion: answer briefly but with complete sentence, e.g., 'I prefer views in other countries.'