视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は直接的で理由も述べられていますが、いくつか改善点があります。まず文が少し冗長で口語的すぎます（例: "I'm not good at taking pictures" を繰り返す）。また、詳細が不足しているため話題を広げられていません。改善のためには、トピック文を明確にし、1〜2の具体例や状況（いつ・どんな被写体でうまく撮れないか）、簡単な対策や感情を加えると良いでしょう。接続詞（for example, because, so）を使い文章の流れを良くし、文は3文以内に収める練習をしてください。

範例: I don't really like taking photos of landscapes because I'm not confident with my photography skills. For example, when I try to capture wide scenes with my smartphone, the pictures often look blurry or washed out, so I usually avoid taking them unless someone else is with me.

建議: 回答は好みを述べていますが、理由と具体的な説明があいまいで文法的な誤りもあります（"since I was born so" や時制の不一致）。改善点としては、明確なトピック文の後に具体的な理由を1つか2つ示し、接続詞（because, so, therefore）で論理をつなぐこと、過去の経験を述べる際は正しい時制と自然な表現を使うことが必要です。例えば『都会にずっと住んでいるため、田舎の静けさが好み』など具体的な特徴を挙げてください。

範例: I prefer rural views because I grew up in a busy city and enjoy the quiet and open spaces of the countryside. For instance, I like walking in fields and seeing wide horizons, which feels relaxing compared with noisy streets.

建議: 回答は好みを表していますが、文に混乱があり不完全なセンテンス（"I have never."）や語順・冗長が見られます。改善のため、不要な接続語（And）を避け、はっきりしたトピック文を最初に置き、その後具体的な理由や例を付け足してください。語彙はシンプルで構いませんが正確な文法（例: "Japan has a lot of beautiful scenery"）を使い、結論を1文でまとめる練習をしましょう。

範例: It's hard to choose, but I prefer views in my own country because Japan has diverse and beautiful scenery, from mountains to coastal areas. For example, I enjoy visiting local places like lakes and temples, which feel familiar and special to me.

× No, I don't like taking pictures of different views because I'm not good at taking pictures and my camera on my smartphone is not good.

✓ No, I don't like taking pictures of different views because I'm not good at taking pictures and the camera on my smartphone is not good.

The phrase 'my camera on my smartphone' is awkward and incorrect because the possessive 'my' is redundant with 'on my smartphone'. Use 'the camera on my smartphone' to refer to that specific camera. Improve by saying 'the camera on my smartphone' or 'my smartphone's camera.'

× I prefer views in rural areas because I've lived in urban areas since I was born so. I tried to live in rural areas.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I've lived in urban areas since I was born, so I want to live in rural areas.

The original has sentence fragments and awkward connectors. 'Since I was born so.' is not correct word order; 'since I was born' should be followed by a comma then 'so' linking clause. 'I tried to live in rural areas' implies a past attempt rather than a desire. Changing to 'I want to live in rural areas' matches the intended meaning. Suggestion: use clear connectors and consistent tense and intention verbs like 'want' or 'would like.'

× And it's difficult to choose, but I prefer views in my country because Japan is has a lot of beautiful scenery and there are a lot of views. I have never.

✓ It's difficult to choose, but I prefer views in my country because Japan has a lot of beautiful scenery and many interesting places to see.

Starting with 'And' is unnecessary; remove it. 'Japan is has' duplicates verbs; use only 'has.' 'There are a lot of views' is vague; 'many interesting places to see' is clearer. The fragment 'I have never.' is incomplete and should be removed. Suggestion: avoid starting sentences with 'And' in formal answers, ensure single verb per clause, and remove sentence fragments.