视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetitions and incorrect words (e.g. "wheel wheels"), and provide one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct grammar (subject–verb agreement and verb forms) and reduce redundancy.

範例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different scenes because photos help me preserve memories. For example, when I look through my phone album, I can immediately recall where I was and how I felt, which makes the images meaningful.

建議: Clarify your preference and use correct vocabulary. Start with a direct statement, then give a clear reason and one specific example. Avoid unclear or garbled phrases (e.g. "wheel", "BC", "S spatial"). Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas and correct grammar.

範例: I prefer views in urban areas because I live in a city and I enjoy the architecture and street life. For instance, city rooftops and busy markets provide interesting details that I can capture in photos, so the pictures remind me of daily life.

建議: Be concise and avoid repetition. Give a clear topic sentence about your preference, then provide a specific reason and an example. Fix grammar (remove repeated words, correct verb forms) and use linking words like "although" to acknowledge the other possibility.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because they remind me of my hometown and family. Although foreign landscapes can be interesting, looking at familiar places helps me feel connected to my past, for example, photos of local festivals always bring back strong memories.

× I love taking pictures of different wheel wheels because you can keep your memories in your pictures and when you get home you have free time.

✓ I love taking pictures of different views because you can keep your memories in your pictures and when you get home you have free time.

The word 'wheel wheels' is incorrect and unclear; it seems the student meant 'views'. This is a vocabulary/word choice error that affects pronoun reference and clarity. Use the correct noun 'views' so pronouns like 'you' refer clearly to someone viewing photos.

× When you open your album you can see your different pictures on your phone and makes you reminds of the of the situations.

✓ When you open your album you can see your different pictures on your phone and they remind you of the situations.

The original contains subject-verb agreement errors and extra words. 'Makes you reminds' is incorrect because 'they remind' is needed: plural subject 'pictures' takes plural verb 'remind'. Remove redundant 'makes' and extra 'the of the' for grammatical clarity.

× I prefer wheels in urban areas because I live in a city and I don't really like the BC or crowded places.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because I live in a city and I don't really like busy or crowded places.

'Wheels' is incorrect word choice; 'views' fits context. 'BC' appears to be a typo; likely 'busy'. Use the adjective 'busy' to modify 'places'. Correcting these yields a clear adjective-noun phrase 'busy or crowded places'.

× So it's hard to keep the memories from outside your your hometown.

✓ So it's hard to keep memories of places outside your hometown.

The original repeats 'your' and uses an awkward prepositional phrase 'keep the memories from outside your hometown'. Rephrase to 'keep memories of places outside your hometown' for natural English word order and correct preposition use.

× So it's really S spatial for me.

✓ So it's really special for me.

'S spatial' is a typo. The intended word is 'special'. Correcting spelling restores the intended adjective describing personal feelings.

× And yeah, the real.

✓ And yeah, it's real.

Sentence fragment 'the real' is unclear and lacks a verb. Changing to 'it's real' completes the sentence with subject and verb, producing a coherent comment.

× I do prefer views in my in my own country because I really miss my hometown and but it's not that bad to see reveals in a different country.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because I really miss my hometown, but it's not that bad to see scenes in a different country.

Remove duplicated phrase 'in my in my' and fix conjunction placement: 'and but' is incorrect; use just 'but'. 'Reveals' is incorrect here; 'scenes' or 'views' fits. This corrects pronoun duplication and vocabulary choice.

× But I would prefer to see feel in my own country 'cause it's really reminds me of everything.

✓ But I would prefer to see them in my own country because they really remind me of everything.

'See feel' is incorrect—likely 'see them' (the views/photos). Use 'because' instead of informal ''cause'. 'It's really reminds' mixes subject forms; for plural 'they remind' is correct. This fixes pronoun reference and subject-verb agreement.