视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, correct small grammar and word-choice errors, and add one specific example to make your answer more vivid. Use a clear topic sentence, then a linking phrase and a short supporting detail. Avoid repetition and limit to about 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because I like capturing variety instead of the same scenes repeatedly. For example, when I visit a seaside town I photograph the coastline and local streets to remember the atmosphere. This helps me relive the moment when I look back at the pictures.

建議: Start with a clear direct answer, then contrast the two choices using linking words. Fix article and word-form errors (e.g., 'an urban area', 'scenery' not 'sceneries'), remove unfinished fragments. Add one specific detail to support each preference.

範例: I prefer both, depending on the moment. Because I live in an urban area, I appreciate city views like skyscrapers and busy streets since they make me feel at home; however, I also love rural views in Switzerland, especially the snow-capped mountains, because they feel peaceful and picturesque.

建議: Give a direct short answer, then briefly explain with a specific example. Correct redundancy (avoid repeating 'different scenarios' and 'different scenery') and tighten the sentence into two or three clear sentences. Mention what made the foreign view special.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy discovering new landscapes and cultures. For instance, on Jeju Island in South Korea I watched the sun set over the sea and the volcanic cliffs — that combination of colors and textures was unforgettable.

× One of the main reasons is that I don't want to have the same view in my pictures all over again.

✓ One of the main reasons is that I don't want to have the same views in my pictures again.

The original uses 'the same view... all over again' which is awkward; 'views' plural matches 'pictures' and 'again' is sufficient. This is an issue with word choice and noun number; change 'view' to 'views' for consistency with 'pictures' and remove redundant 'all over' to make the sentence natural. Suggestion: Use plural 'views' when referring to multiple photos and avoid redundant phrases.

× And another reason is I if I look at the pictures, I want to see the whole few that I saw in that moment I was taking a photo with my phone.

✓ Another reason is that when I look at the pictures, I want to see the whole view I saw at the moment I took the photo with my phone.

Problems: incorrect word order ('is I if'), incorrect word choice ('few' should be 'view'), incorrect tense and phrasing. This fits Incorrect use of prepositions and sentence structure. Corrections: use 'that' after 'is', use 'when' instead of 'if' to indicate time, change 'few' to 'view', use 'at the moment' and past tense 'took' for the completed action. Suggestion: keep clauses in logical order: 'Another reason is that when I look at the pictures, I want to see the whole view I saw when I took the photo.'

× As I live in a urban area, I like the view of a city and the skyscrapers and it gives me a feeling of coming home.

✓ As I live in an urban area, I like the view of the city and its skyscrapers; it gives me a feeling of coming home.

Errors: incorrect article 'a urban' should be 'an urban' (vowel sound), article use before 'city' and possessive for 'skyscrapers' is more natural. This matches Incorrect use of prepositions/articles. Also sentence run-on; split or add punctuation. Suggestion: use 'an' before vowel sounds and use 'the city' or 'my city' and 'its skyscrapers' for clarity.

× And I definitely love rural areas in Switzerland, especially the mountains.

✓ I definitely love rural areas in Switzerland, especially the mountains.

This sentence is mostly correct but begins with an unnecessary conjunction 'And', which is a sentence structure issue. Remove 'And' to make the sentence more formal and concise. Suggestion: avoid starting statements with coordinating conjunctions in formal speech.

× The scenery is so beautiful. You have.

✓ The scenery is so beautiful.

'You have.' is a sentence without a clear verb or object and appears incomplete. This matches Sentence without a verb. Remove the fragment. Suggestion: if intending to address the listener, complete the thought, e.g., 'You have to see it.'

× I prefer views in other countries because I love to travel and experience different scenarios and also different scenery and one of my most favorite views is or was when I was on Chatu Island in South Korea and looking at the sea and just taking in that scenery is amazing.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I love to travel and experience different scenes and scenery. One of my favorite views was when I was on Chatu Island in South Korea, looking at the sea; taking in that scenery was amazing.

Multiple issues: tense inconsistency ('is or was'), word choice ('scenarios' incorrect; use 'scenes'), redundancy ('most favorite' incorrect), and run-on sentence. These relate to Present/Past tense issues and sentence structure. Corrections: choose past tense 'was' for a past experience, use 'favorite' (not 'most favorite'), replace 'scenarios' with 'scenes', and split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and avoid redundant modifiers.