视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and make your point clearly with a topic sentence followed by one or two specific details. Avoid vague phrasing like "you know something" and unnecessary repetition. Use linking words for coherence (e.g., "because", "so", "and"). Aim for 2–3 sentences and a clearer reason why you enjoy taking photos.

範例: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking pictures because they help me remember special places and moments, and I often review them on my phone later. For example, I photograph sunsets and city skylines so I can compare different trips.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference (or that you like both), then give two concise, specific contrasting examples using linking words (e.g., "on the one hand", "on the other hand"). Reduce hesitations and filler words. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and use precise vocabulary (e.g., "skylines", "country roads").

範例: I like both urban and rural views. On the one hand, city skylines and tall buildings appeal to me because of their dramatic shapes; on the other hand, I enjoy country roads, trees and mountains for their peaceful atmosphere.

建議: Give a direct response first, then explain briefly with a specific reason. If you lack experience, say so clearly and add a simple prediction or comparison. Avoid repetition and vague phrases like "it's good." Use concise language and one linking word (e.g., "because", "however").

範例: I can't really choose because I haven't travelled much abroad. However, I expect other countries to offer different and interesting scenery, for example coastal landscapes or historic architecture that we don't have at home.

× Yes, I really do because it feels like you know something that you can check it on or see after that day or that scenery, I can check it on my phone.

✓ Yes, I really do because it feels like you have something you can look back on or see later, like that scenery; I can check it on my phone.

Original sentence uses awkward verb forms and an unnecessary 'it' after 'check' and 'know something that you can check it on' is incorrect structure. Use 'have something you can look back on' or 'something you can check' without an extra object pronoun. Also split the long run-on sentence into clearer clauses. Suggestion: simplify verb phrases and remove redundant pronouns.

× I, I like both in rural and urban areas, like I like to capture the scenery, uh, in high buildings like that or something in the road and also the country Rd. Like it's the provinces, the trees, the mountains.

✓ I like both rural and urban areas. I like to capture scenery from high buildings or along the road, and also country roads with trees and mountains.

Incorrect and redundant use of prepositions ('both in rural and urban areas' should be 'both rural and urban areas'; 'in high buildings' -> 'from high buildings'; 'something in the road' is unclear). Also 'country Rd.' should be 'country roads' and pluralized. Suggestions: choose correct prepositions 'from' for viewpoints and use plural nouns where appropriate, and break into shorter sentences.

× I can't choose right now because I don't know or I didn't go to other countries, but I think it's good. I think the other country has a good scenery.

✓ I can't choose right now because I haven't been to other countries, but I think they have nice scenery.

Mixes present simple and past simple incorrectly. Use present perfect 'haven't been' to indicate life experience up to now. Also 'the other country' is vague and 'a good scenery' is uncountable; use 'nice scenery' and plural 'they' for other countries. Suggestion: use present perfect for unspecified past experiences and correct noun usage for 'scenery'.