视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce fillers (uh) and repeatitions, start with a clear topic sentence and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy. For example, say why a particular view is relaxing and give a brief example of a favourite scene.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because it helps me relax and remember places. For instance, I often photograph sunsets at a nearby lake since the colours and reflections calm me and remind me of that day.

建議: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Begin with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then give a specific reason and one short example using a linking word (e.g., because, for example).

範例: I prefer rural views because there are fewer buildings to spoil the scenery. For example, I enjoy photographing rolling hills and open fields since they offer clear horizons and natural colours.

建議: Clarify and correct unclear phrases ("having wheels" and "using my own country"). Give a direct answer, then explain briefly why with a specific detail. Use a linking word to connect reasons (e.g., because, since).

範例: I prefer views in my own country because I have not traveled abroad yet. For example, I often watch the sky from a local hilltop, and the familiar landscape and quiet atmosphere help me unwind.

× Yes, definitely I like uh taking pictures of different views uh, as it uh, helps me to unwind and relax.

✓ Yes, definitely I like taking pictures of different views, as it helps me to unwind and relax.

The original sentence had extra filler 'uh' and an unnecessary comma placement that interrupted the present participle phrase 'taking pictures'. Removing fillers and tightening punctuation makes the participle phrase correctly complement the verb 'like' and improves fluency. Suggestion: avoid fillers and keep the participle phrase directly after 'like'.

× Also taking pictures lead uh, uh taking pictures make me feel remembered about the places where.

✓ Also, taking pictures makes me remember the places.

The subject 'taking pictures' is a singular gerund phrase and requires the singular verb 'makes' (subject-verb agreement). 'Make me feel remembered about the places where' is ungrammatical and awkward; use 'makes me remember the places' to express the intended meaning. Suggestion: use singular verb with gerund subjects and simplify the clause structure.

× That's an interesting question. I like taking pictures of views from rural areas as it does not have large buildings that can spoil the view.

✓ That's an interesting question. I like taking pictures of views in rural areas because they do not have large buildings that can spoil the view.

The pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to 'rural areas' (plural); use 'they' to agree in number. Also 'of views from rural areas' is wordy; 'in rural areas' is more natural. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree with their antecedents in number and prefer concise prepositions.

× So it basically it provides the clear clear picture and.

✓ So it basically provides a clear picture.

The original repeats 'it' and 'clear' and ends abruptly with 'and', producing a sentence fragment. Removing the redundancy and the trailing conjunction yields a complete sentence. Suggestion: avoid repetition and ensure sentences do not end with incomplete conjunctions.

× I prefer having wheels in my own country till now because I haven't visited any other country abroad.

✓ I prefer traveling within my own country so far because I haven't visited any other country.

'Having wheels in my own country' is unclear and likely a mistranslation; 'traveling within my own country' fits the context. 'Till now' is better expressed as 'so far'. 'Other country abroad' is redundant; use 'other country'. Suggestion: choose prepositions and phrases that match the intended meaning and avoid redundant words.

× So in my case I prefer using my own country as sometimes looking at the sky, it means a lot to me.

✓ So in my case I prefer my own country, because sometimes looking at the sky there means a lot to me.

The clause 'looking at the sky, it means a lot to me' is a comma splice and awkwardly placed. Relocate 'there' to clarify location and connect clauses with 'because' to show reason. Suggestion: avoid comma splices and place adverbial phrases (like 'there') next to the words they modify.

× It helps me relax.

✓ It helps me relax.

This sentence is correct. The present tense 'helps' appropriately describes a general, habitual effect. No change necessary.