视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix tense and agreement errors (e.g., "it makes me remember"), avoid repetition like "remember" and "turn back time."

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me remember special trips. For example, when I travel with my family I take landscape shots so I can look back at the scenery later; this always brings back good memories.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and use accurate vocabulary and grammar. Use linking words (for example, "because" or "so") and more specific details instead of vague phrases like "flowings". Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer views in rural areas because I enjoy natural scenery such as mountains and lakes. For example, I like watching calm lakes and walking through green fields, which feels more relaxing than busy city streets.

建議: Correct grammar and word choice, and be more specific. Start with a clear statement, then give a concrete example and a natural concluding remark. Avoid words like "exploit" (use "explore") and fix plural/singular forms and tense consistency.

範例: I prefer views in other countries, especially Switzerland, because the alpine scenery is breathtaking. For example, I once rode a train with my family and watched snow-capped mountains and green valleys pass by; it was unforgettable, and I would love to visit again.

× Yes, I like to take a picture of different views because when I take a picture I can remember the place that I visit with my friends or families and I think it make me to remember and turn back time and it is one great memorial moment and I think I take a picture when I travel.

✓ Yes, I like to take pictures of different views because when I take a picture I can remember the places that I visit with my friends or family, and I think it helps me remember and relive those moments; it is a great way to keep memories, so I take pictures when I travel.

Multiple issues: 'take a picture of different views' should use plural 'pictures' to match general habit (see plural issue, but corrected here under present participle as the main corrections involve verb forms). 'places that I visit' requires plural 'places' to match 'different views.' 'friends or families' should be 'friends or family' (incorrect plural of family). 'I think it make me to remember' is ungrammatical; correct is 'it helps me remember' (use of 'helps' and bare infinitive). 'turn back time' is idiomatic misuse; 'relive those moments' is clearer. Suggestions: use plural nouns for general habits, use 'help' + verb (helps me remember), avoid 'to' after 'make'/'help' when not needed, and prefer 'family' without plural when speaking of relatives collectively.

× If I need to pick one, I would pick the views from rural areas because I prefer countryside or Mountain View rather than city views.

✓ If I had to pick one, I would choose views from rural areas because I prefer the countryside or mountain views rather than city views.

Use 'If I had to pick one' (conditional phrasing) instead of 'If I need to pick one.' Use 'choose' rather than 'pick' for style. 'the countryside' needs the definite article. 'Mountain View' is a place name; in this context 'mountain views' (lowercase, plural) is correct. Suggestions: use proper conditional tense for hypothetical choices, include articles with nouns like 'countryside,' and use plural or lowercase for general phrases like 'mountain views.'

× I like to watching the lakes or flowings and I like to explore the nature around the city views.

✓ I like watching lakes and rivers, and I like to explore nature around the city.

'I like to watching' mixes infinitive and -ing; use 'I like watching' or 'I like to watch.' 'the lakes or flowings' is incorrect: 'rivers' or 'streams' are natural choices; 'flowings' is not a noun normally used. 'explore the nature' should be 'explore nature' (no article). 'around the city views' is awkward; use 'around the city.' Suggestions: choose correct nouns for landscape features (lakes, rivers), use either 'like watching' or 'like to watch' consistently, and omit unnecessary articles when speaking of abstract nouns like 'nature.'

× I prefer views in other country, especially the views in Switzerland.

✓ I prefer views in other countries, especially the views in Switzerland.

'in other country' should be plural 'in other countries' when speaking generally. 'the views in Switzerland' is fine. Suggestion: use plural when referring to 'other countries' in general comparisons.

× I used to sit on a train with my families and spend time together watching the views.

✓ I used to sit on a train with my family and spend time together watching the views.

'my families' is incorrect; 'family' as a collective noun is correct. If referring to different family members, say 'my family members.' Suggestion: use 'family' (singular) when referring to one's relatives collectively.

× I found it's very beautiful and stunning and I still remember it until now.

✓ I found it very beautiful and stunning, and I still remember it now.

Mix of past and present expressions: 'I found it's' mixes past 'found' with present 'it's.' Use 'I found it' or 'I find it' consistently. 'I still remember it until now' is awkward; 'I still remember it now' or 'I remember it to this day' are better. Suggestions: keep tense consistent; prefer 'I found it very beautiful' for past reflection and 'I still remember it to this day' for lasting memory.

× If I had a chance, I would exploit more.

✓ If I had the chance, I would explore more.

'exploit' is incorrect and has negative connotations; 'explore' is intended. Use article 'the chance' or 'a chance' — both possible, 'the chance' sounds natural. Modal structure 'If I had..., I would...' is correct. Suggestions: replace 'exploit' with 'explore' when talking about seeing more places; keep conditional structure as is.