视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, correct word choice, and reduce hesitations and repetitions. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Replace incorrect phrases (e.g., “ultra natural utter natural”, “passionate by”) with natural collocations such as “very natural” and “passionate about.”

範例: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy photographing sunrises and sunsets because their vivid colors are calming. Also, I like close-up shots of flowers because I’m passionate about capturing fine textures and small details.

建議: Avoid filler words and unclear verbs. Give a clear topic sentence stating preference depending on season, then explain with specific reasons and linking words (e.g., “in spring and summer... because...” and “however, in autumn and winter... because...” ). Use correct verbs like “prefer” or “enjoy.”

範例: It depends on the season. In spring and summer I prefer rural areas because the fields and flowers are vibrant, whereas in autumn and winter I enjoy city views more because the architecture and lights look more interesting.

建議: Be more confident and complete your thought. Start with a direct answer, then clarify with specific comparisons and a linking word (e.g., “however” or “but”). Avoid hesitations and repeat phrases. Mention concrete examples (e.g., mountains, forests) and state that you would like to see oceans abroad.

範例: That’s a tough question. My country offers a wide variety of landscapes, such as mountains and forests, so I enjoy photographing them; however, we have no ocean, so I’d love to visit other countries to capture coastal views and seascapes.

× I enjoy photographing sunrise and sunsets because the colors are so vivid and they make me feel calm.

✓ I enjoy photographing sunrises and sunsets because the colors are so vivid and they make me feel calm.

Use plural nouns when referring to repeated or general events: 'sunrise and sunsets' mixes singular and plural. Consistently pluralize both as 'sunrises and sunsets' to indicate the recurring events.

× And I also like taking pictures of flowers and ultra natural utter natural things because I am passionate by interesting textures and fine details.

✓ And I also like taking pictures of flowers and ultra-natural, other natural things because I am passionate about interesting textures and fine details.

Use the correct preposition 'passionate about' not 'passionate by'. Also 'ultra natural utter natural' appears to be errors: use 'ultra-natural' or 'other natural' and hyphenate compound adjectives. Ensure words are coherent and separated by commas as needed.

× Oh, it depends on the, uh, season of the year.

✓ Oh, it depends on the season of the year.

Remove filler sounds and extra commas for clear sentence structure. The phrase 'the season of the year' is correct but should not contain 'the, uh,' interruptions in written form.

× I think in the summer and the spring, I usually prepare the rural areas, uh, uh, in the winter or autumn, I think the, uh, open areas much more, uh, active.

✓ I think in the spring and summer I usually prefer rural areas, while in autumn and winter I prefer open areas because they are more active.

The original has incorrect verb choice 'prepare' instead of 'prefer', awkward order, and missing verbs ('open areas much more active'). Use parallel structure: 'prefer rural areas' and 'prefer open areas', and include a verb phrase 'are more active' to complete the idea.

× Uh, it is hard to say.

✓ It is hard to say.

Remove filler 'Uh' in written responses. The sentence is otherwise fine but should avoid unnecessary interjections in formal responses.

× I think my country has a very, uh, wide range of, umm, I think very wide range of landscape, but the, we do not have ocean.

✓ I think my country has a very wide range of landscapes, but we do not have an ocean.

Use plural 'landscapes' for variety. Remove extra fillers. Use the indefinite article 'an' before a singular countable noun 'ocean'. Remove the extra 'the' before 'we'.

× So for the ocean thing.

✓ So I miss the ocean or opportunities to photograph the ocean.

The original is a sentence fragment without a clear verb or subject. Provide a complete sentence that expresses the intended meaning: 'I miss the ocean' or specify 'opportunities to photograph the ocean' to complete the thought.