视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Good answer: clear topic sentence, relevant supporting detail, natural language. To improve, shorten slightly to avoid redundancy and add a specific example to make it more vivid. Use one linking phrase to connect ideas and keep within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I love photographing scenery, especially when I travel to new places. For example, last year I took photos of a sunrise over a lake, which helped me remember the colors and peaceful feeling. I think photos are a great way to preserve special memories.

建議: Answer gives preference and reasons but has grammatical errors and a small coherence issue (“Have me relax…”). Improve by using correct sentence forms, add a linking word, and provide one concrete detail or short example. Keep to 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition.

範例: I prefer rural views because I enjoy being surrounded by nature, like mountains, rivers, and green fields. Moreover, the countryside is much more peaceful than the city, so it helps me relax and escape the hustle and bustle.

建議: The idea is clear but the answer is fragmented and contains errors and incomplete phrases. Improve by making full sentences, using a linking phrase to explain contrast with home, and giving one specific example of a foreign view you liked. Keep it concise and coherent.

範例: I prefer scenery in other countries because traveling abroad exposes me to landscapes I don't have at home. For instance, I once saw snow-capped mountains in Japan, which were completely different from the beaches and green hills in Vietnam.

× Have me relax and escape the hustle and bustle of the city life.

✓ It helps me relax and escape the hustle and bustle of city life.

The original fragment 'Have me relax' incorrectly uses 'have' with the pronoun 'me' to express a result. Use 'help' or a structure like 'It helps me' to show that rural views cause relaxation. Also 'the city life' is unnatural here; use 'city life' without the definite article. Suggestion: use 'It helps me relax...'.

× I think photography is a great way to capture special memories or appreciate the beauty of the landscape I visit.

✓ I think photography is a great way to capture special memories and appreciate the beauty of the landscapes I visit.

The original uses 'or' which implies a choice between capturing memories and appreciating beauty, but the meaning intends both actions simultaneously. Also 'landscape I visit' is awkward; plural 'landscapes I visit' fits when speaking about multiple places. Use 'and' to connect two coordinated verbs and pluralize 'landscape'.

× I definitely prefer rural views because I love being surrounded by nature such as mountains, rivers, and green fields.

✓ I definitely prefer rural views because I love being surrounded by nature, such as mountains, rivers, and green fields.

This sentence is grammatically correct but needs a comma before 'such as' to set off the example phrase. The correction preserves tense and meaning and adds the missing comma for standard punctuation of examples.

× I find the countryside much more peaceful than the city is.

✓ I find the countryside much more peaceful than the city.

Saying 'than the city is' is grammatically permissible but redundant and unnatural in conversational English. The comparative is normally finished with 'than the city.' This keeps the present tense and improves fluency.

× I think I prefer the scenery in other countries because traveling abroad allows me to experience, let's get that quite different from in Vietnam. From the snow capped mountains to crystal clear beaches.

✓ I think I prefer the scenery in other countries because traveling abroad allows me to experience landscapes that are quite different from those in Vietnam, from snow-capped mountains to crystal-clear beaches.

The original contains a broken clause 'lets get that' which is ungrammatical and fragmented. Replace with 'landscapes that are quite different from those in Vietnam' to make a complete comparative clause; use 'those' to refer back to 'landscapes' (pronoun reference). Also join the fragment 'From the snow capped mountains...' to the main sentence. Hyphenate compound adjectives 'snow-capped' and 'crystal-clear.' Ensure consistency and correct comparison structure.