视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatically accurate: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason and an example. Avoid awkward phrases like "that's the thing" and "I want to be remembered" — say you like to preserve memories. Use linking words such as "because" or "for example" to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I love taking photos when I travel because they help me preserve memories of special places. For example, I often photograph mountain ranges and coastlines to remember the atmosphere and light. These images let me revisit the feeling of that trip later.

建議: Correct grammar and clarity: give a clear topic sentence, then explain with specific details and linking words. Fix errors (e.g., "you felt like nothing is topsy" and "isolated cities" are unclear). Use concrete contrasts between urban and rural views.

範例: I prefer rural views because the countryside feels much more peaceful than the city. For example, quiet fields and forests let me relax and notice small details like bird songs and wildflowers, whereas urban views are often noisy and busy.

建議: Avoid repetition and improve grammar and specificity: state your preference clearly, give one or two specific examples of what your country offers, and use correct verb agreement ("doesn't" → "don't"). Use linking words like "for example" or "such as" to introduce specifics.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because it has a wide variety of landscapes. For example, we have high mountain ranges and long coastlines, so I can enjoy both hiking in the hills and relaxing at the beach without traveling far.

× Oh yes, actually, when I'm traveling, that's the thing that I would do the most, taking pictures, because I want to be remembered, the beautiful scenery, especially the mountains, the seas.

✓ Oh yes, actually, when I'm traveling, that's the thing I do most: taking pictures, because I want to remember the beautiful scenery, especially the mountains and the sea.

Originally used 'would do the most' which is awkward for habitual actions; replace with simple present 'do most'. 'Want to be remembered, the beautiful scenery' is incorrect; intended meaning is 'want to remember the beautiful scenery' so use base verb 'remember'. Also plural 'seas' is uncommon here; use 'the sea' or 'the seas' consistently and link 'mountains and the sea' with 'and'. Use a colon or clearer punctuation to separate clauses. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual activities and correct verb choice 'remember' rather than passive 'be remembered'.

× As a nature lover, I prefer the rural areas because for me it feels relaxing. I love the calm scenery where you felt like nothing is topsy you're free from a isolated cities.

✓ As a nature lover, I prefer rural areas because they feel relaxing to me. I love the calm scenery where you feel like nothing is topsy-turvy and you are free from isolated cities.

'the rural areas' is acceptable but 'prefer rural areas' is more natural. 'For me it feels relaxing' is wordy; 'they feel relaxing to me' agrees with plural subject. The phrase 'where you felt like' mixes tenses; use present 'you feel'. 'topsy' is incomplete; correct idiom is 'topsy-turvy'. 'you're free from a isolated cities' has article and number errors: 'a isolated cities' mixes singular and plural and wrong article; correct is 'from isolated cities' or 'from an isolated city' depending on meaning. Suggestions: keep consistent tense, use standard idioms ('topsy-turvy'), and ensure articles match singular/plural nouns.

× I prefer the views in my country because my country has a lot to offer. I mean, we have all the mountains, the oceans, the seas, a beautiful landscape, and some countries doesn't have that.

✓ I prefer the views in my country because it has a lot to offer. I mean, we have mountains, oceans, beautiful landscapes, and some countries don't have that.

Using 'my country' twice is repetitive; replace second instance with pronoun 'it'. 'We have all the mountains, the oceans, the seas, a beautiful landscape' is awkward and inconsistent in number; use plural or uncountable forms consistently: 'mountains, oceans, beautiful landscapes'. The clause 'some countries doesn't have that' has subject-verb agreement error: 'countries' (plural) requires 'don't', not 'doesn't'. Suggestions: use pronouns to avoid repetition, match noun plurality, and ensure verb agrees with subject.