视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more natural: answer directly, correct grammar, avoid confusing phrases. Start with a topic sentence (Yes/No), then briefly explain why using linking words. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'selfies', 'scenery').

範例: Not really. I rarely take photos of views; I prefer to enjoy the scenery in person rather than taking selfies or pictures because it helps me relax and remember the moment better.

建議: Correct word choice and grammar, and avoid repetition. Use a clear topic sentence (I prefer rural views) and support it with specific reasons using linking words (because, so). Give one or two specific details (quiet, fresh air, landscapes).

範例: I prefer rural views because I dislike crowded places and enjoy natural landscapes. For example, I like wide fields and quiet trails where I can breathe fresh air and hear birds instead of city noise.

建議: Make the sentence structure complete and more natural: state your preference and give specific reasons with linking words. Provide a concise example comparing the two countries to show contrast.

範例: Although I'm from Japan, I prefer views in New Zealand because it has vast natural scenery and dramatic landscapes. For instance, New Zealand's mountains and lakes feel more open and wild compared to the more compact scenery I see at home.

× I don't really like taking pictures behind myself, for example if selfies or I like to just watch the views.

✓ I don't really like taking pictures of myself, like selfies; I prefer to just look at the views.

The original sentence misuses 'behind myself' and has awkward structure. 'Taking pictures of myself' (present participle phrase) correctly expresses selfies. 'Like' should be 'like selfies' not 'if selfies'. Also restructure the sentence to separate the dislike of taking selfies and the preference to look at views for clarity: use a semicolon or conjunction. Suggestion: say 'I don't really like taking pictures of myself, like selfies; I prefer to just look at the views.' Note: This correction addresses incorrect phrase use and sentence structure while keeping present tense.

× I definitely prefer fusion rural areas because I don't like crowded places and I I like nature's so.

✓ I definitely prefer rural areas because I don't like crowded places and I like nature.

'Fusion rural areas' is incorrect adjective use; likely 'fusion' is unnecessary. The doubled 'I I' is a repetition error. 'Nature's' is a possessive form used incorrectly; use the noun 'nature'. Also the sentence was awkwardly ended with 'so' which is unnecessary. Suggestion: simplify to 'I definitely prefer rural areas because I don't like crowded places and I like nature.' This correction fixes adjective misuse, removes repetition, and corrects possessive to noun form.

× I'm from Japan but I prefer the view in New Zealand because New Zealand has so much nature and the beautiful.

✓ I'm from Japan, but I prefer the views in New Zealand because New Zealand has so much natural beauty.

'The view' is too specific; 'the views' or 'the scenery' is more natural. 'So much nature and the beautiful' is ungrammatical: 'nature' as a noun needs a modifier like 'natural beauty'. Change to 'natural beauty' to express the idea. Also add a comma before 'but' for clarity. Suggestion: say 'I prefer the views in New Zealand because New Zealand has so much natural beauty.'