视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason and a brief example. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and correct small grammatical issues (e.g., “my major is related to this”).

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because I love nature and outdoor scenes. For example, I often photograph forests and rivers near my town to capture changing light, and because my major is related to visual arts, I try to compose each shot carefully.

建議: Answer directly, then give one clear reason and a specific example. Reduce fillers (uh) and correct grammar (e.g., “many chances to take photos of them”). Use a linking phrase like “because” or “for example.”

範例: I prefer urban views because Ankara has a variety of interesting buildings and architectural details. For example, I often walk downtown to photograph modern facades and historical monuments, which gives me many chances to practice different composition techniques.

建議: Make the comparison clearer and avoid vague phrasing. Start with a direct statement (I prefer…), then explain why and give a specific detail or example. Fix odd phrasing like “I love leaves” if you meant landscapes or foliage.

範例: I enjoy both, but I prefer photographing views in other countries when I travel because cities like New York offer unique skylines and street scenes. For instance, the contrast between skyscrapers and crowded streets in Manhattan creates dramatic photos that I don’t usually find at home.

× 'I like taking pictures of different views because I love nature and I like I love taking photos of things in my in my aspect. Umm, Additionally, my major is connected with this.'

✓ 'I like taking pictures of different views because I love nature, and I enjoy taking photos of things from my point of view. Additionally, my major is connected with this.'

'The original sentence has repetition ("I like I love") and the phrase "in my aspect" is incorrect. Use the gerund "taking" correctly and replace the awkward phrase with "from my point of view" to express perspective. Also combine clauses with a comma and conjunction for clarity.'

× 'I prefer views in urban areas because I live in Ankara and we have many buildings, uh, much more than we need, so I have so many chance to take a photos of them.'

✓ 'I prefer views in urban areas because I live in Ankara and we have many buildings, much more than we need, so I have so many chances to take photos of them.'

'Chance' is a countable noun and must be plural here (chances). Also remove the article "a" before "photos" because "photos" is plural. These changes correct number agreement between nouns and their modifiers.'

× 'I love leaves in my country, but I like to be in New York and take photos of the numerous buildings in there because I think it's so poetic and it's so magical.'

✓ 'I love living in my country, but I would like to be in New York and take photos of the numerous buildings there because I think it is very poetic and magical.'

'Love leaves' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely "love living." "In there" is unidiomatic; use "there." Also replace contraction "it's" with "it is" for formal clarity and use "very poetic and magical" to avoid redundant 'so' + adjective. Use conditional "would like" to express preference for being somewhere else.'