视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant, with good vocabulary like “lighting” and “wide shots.” To improve, make the response more concise and remove the hesitation (“I don't.”) that breaks fluency. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two linked supporting details using a linking word (for example, “because” or “especially since”). Keep it under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because changing light can transform a scene. For example, I prefer wide shots of nature and coastlines rather than close-up portraits, since they capture atmosphere and scale.

建議: This is a strong response: direct topic sentence, reasons, and a concluding preference. To make it more natural and cohesive, replace the comma splice after the first clause with a connector and vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., “drain my energy” instead of “tire me out”). Also avoid absolutes like “every time” unless you can justify them briefly.

範例: I prefer rural areas because they feel calmer and more natural. Although urban scenes can be exciting, the noise and traffic often drain my energy, so given the choice I usually pick the countryside.

建議: Good points and specific contrasts between familiar and novel views. Improve fluency by removing fillers (“MMM”, “Honestly.”) and combining short sentences with linking words for coherence (for example, “while” and “however”). Also try to provide one brief example to make the comparison more concrete.

範例: I enjoy both, but views in my own country feel more personal because they remind me of home and family. While familiar places bring comfort, views abroad offer different textures and colors that make me feel curious and inspired—for example, the coastal cliffs I saw on a trip to Portugal felt very different from those at home.

× I don't. I'm not very into close up portraits, but wide shots of nature or coastlines really interest me.

✓ I'm not very into close-up portraits, but wide shots of nature or coastlines really interest me.

The fragment 'I don't.' is an incomplete sentence and creates redundancy and confusion; it likely aimed to contradict the previous positive clause but is unnecessary. Also 'close up' should be hyphenated as 'close-up' when used as a compound adjective before a noun. Suggest removing the fragment and using the hyphenated compound adjective to make a single clear sentence.

× Urban views can be exciting, but the noise and traffic tends to tire me out faster.

✓ Urban views can be exciting, but the noise and traffic tend to tire me out faster.

The compound subject 'the noise and traffic' is plural, so the verb should be the plural form 'tend' rather than the singular 'tends'. Use plural verb to agree with the compound subject.

× MMM that's a good one. Honestly. I enjoy both, but views in my own country feel more personal.

✓ Hmm, that's a good one. Honestly, I enjoy both, but views in my own country feel more personal.

'MMM' is a nonstandard filler; 'Hmm' is more appropriate. 'Honestly.' is a sentence fragment; it should be connected with a comma to the following clause ('Honestly, I enjoy both') to form a complete sentence. This fixes sentence fragmentation and improves clarity.

× When I see familiar places it gives me a sense of comfort.

✓ When I see familiar places, it gives me a sense of comfort.

A comma is needed after the introductory subordinate clause 'When I see familiar places' to separate it from the main clause. This is a punctuation rule that improves sentence flow and readability.