视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and concise with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and provide one brief reason or example. Use correct vocabulary (scene, scenery) and sentence structure.

範例: Not really. I don’t usually take photos of different views because I prefer to enjoy the moment without my camera. For example, when I visit a park I focus on walking and relaxing rather than taking pictures.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and correct minor vocabulary and grammar errors (e.g., "few" -> "fields" or "flowers", "straight" -> "stress"). Add one specific example to support your reason and use a linking word to connect ideas.

範例: I prefer views in rural areas because they make me feel peaceful and relaxed. For example, seeing open fields and tall trees helps me unwind after a busy week, so I often go to the countryside to clear my mind.

建議: Give a clear direct answer, avoid fillers, and use correct vocabulary (views, vivid). Provide a specific reason or brief example and remove unclear phrases. Keep to one or two supporting sentences and correct grammar.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because they often feel more vibrant and different from what I see at home. For instance, when I traveled to Thailand I was amazed by the bright coastal scenery and colorful markets, which felt more vivid than the landscapes back home.

× Well, taking pictures is not really my cup of tea because I'm not really interested in so taking a picture of different scenario scene.

✓ Well, taking pictures is not really my cup of tea because I'm not really interested in taking pictures of different scenes.

The sentence contains unnecessary fillers and incorrect noun forms. 'Interested in' should be followed by a gerund ('taking'), not 'so taking'. Use the plural 'pictures' and plural countable noun 'scenes' to match the general idea. Remove redundant 'so' and repeated 'really' for clarity. Suggestion: Say 'interested in taking pictures of different scenes.'

× When I see green space like few and trees, I can unwind and forget about the noise and straight of the city.

✓ When I see green spaces like fields and trees, I can unwind and forget about the noise and stress of the city.

Several word-choice and number errors: 'green space' should be plural 'green spaces' when speaking generally. 'Few' is incorrect; likely intended 'fields'. 'Straight' is a wrong word; correct word is 'stress'. Also 'noise and stress' is a common collocation. Suggestion: replace incorrect words with 'fields' and 'stress' and use plurals for general statements.

× Well, I prefer wheels in other countries because umm, it's more vivid than my country.

✓ Well, I prefer views in other countries because they are more vivid than the views in my country.

The student used 'wheels' instead of 'views' (word choice error) and mixed singular 'it's' with plural 'views'. Use 'they are' to agree with the plural noun 'views', and specify 'the views in my country' for a clear comparison. Suggestion: say 'they are more vivid than the views in my country.'

× My country is it can only offer. Unlimit unlimited warranty.

✓ My country can only offer limited opportunities.

This fragment contains a broken sentence and wrong word choice. 'My country is it can only offer.' is ungrammatical; combine into 'My country can only offer...'. 'Unlimit unlimited warranty' makes no sense in context; likely intended 'limited' or 'limited opportunities'. Use a complete clause with a clear noun. Suggestion: identify the intended meaning and rewrite as a complete sentence like 'My country can only offer limited opportunities.'