视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 用中文（简体）给出的改进建议： - 回答要更自然并避免重复。开头直接用一句主题句，然后用一到两句补充细节即可。避免重复说明同一件事（例如多次说“我喜欢拍不同的风景”）。 - 使用更具体的细节来丰富内容，比如常拍的具体场景（公园、街道、建筑），拍照的目的（记录、分享、练习构图），以及拍照的频率或习惯。这样能展示更多词汇和表达能力。 - 控制句子数量，避免使用含糊词（如“etcetera”），用连词使表达更连贯。 示例改进要点：开头一句主题句→一两句具体细节→一句结论或习惯说明。

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. I usually take my camera to local parks and streets where I can capture architecture and everyday scenes to practice composition. I often take photos at weekends and share the best ones with friends online.

建議: 用中文（简体）给出的改进建议： - 避免重复和结巴（如“specific specifically”）。使用简洁的主题句直接回答问题，然后用1–2个具体理由支持观点。 - 提供更具体的例子或对比（例如提到城市的高楼、桥梁和设计良好的公共空间），并用连接词（such as, for example, moreover）使论述更连贯。 - 使用更自然的词汇替换口语化或不准确表达（如“artificial stuff”可以改为“man-made structures”或“urban architecture”）。 示例结构：主题句→具体理由与例子→简短结论。

範例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy modern architecture and well-designed public spaces. For example, skyscrapers, pedestrian bridges and landscaped plazas often catch my eye, and I like photographing the contrast between old and new buildings.

建議: 用中文（简体）给出的改进建议： - 回答要更明确，可以先给出总体立场（如“没有强烈偏好”），然后用具体比较说明两者的吸引力，而不是重复同一句话。 - 提供具体细节比较（例如自己国家的公园更自然、邻里氛围好；国外的建筑更有历史感或设计感），并用连接词（however, on the other hand）使对比清晰。 - 避免笼统表达“this is a hard question”，可用一句简短总结结束。

範例: I don't have a strong preference because both have their merits. For instance, parks in my country often feel more natural and peaceful, whereas in other countries I admire distinctive architectural styles and urban planning. Overall, I enjoy photographing both for different reasons.

× I have a camera that I used to take a lot of pictures with.

✓ I have a camera that I use to take a lot of pictures with.

句中使用了“used to”会被理解为过去常做但现在不再做的动作。而语境是说现在仍然常常用相机拍照，应该使用一般现在时的“use”。建议：当要表达现在经常做的动作，用一般现在时（use），而不是“used to”。

× I usually take pictures of the perks of the neighborhood, of the views I see, etcetera.

✓ I usually take pictures of the parks in the neighborhood and the views I see, etc.

原句中“perks”是‘福利、好处’的意思，作者想表达公园应为“parks”。此外句子结构稍乱，使用并列更清晰。建议：注意近形词的选择，写作前检查是否为正确词汇；用并列连接相似项更自然。

× I prefer views in urban areas because I specific specifically like the views that are modernized, for example, like well constructed buildings and well constructed parks.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because I specifically like modernized views, for example well-constructed buildings and parks.

原句有重复（specific specifically）且副词位置和形容词构词不够紧凑。将副词放在动词或形容词前（specifically like modernized views）更自然；“well constructed”作复合形容词时通常连字号连接。建议：避免重复词；副词通常放在动词前或形容词前；复合形容词用连字符并保持简洁。

× I like artificial stuff I think.

✓ I like artificial things, I think.

“stuff”虽口语常用，但在正式回答中用“things”更恰当；句中缺少逗号以分隔插入语“I think”。建议：在正式场合用更具体词汇并用标点分隔语气词或插入语。

× I don't really have a preference here because I like the views of my country and I also do like the views in other countries.

✓ I don't really have a preference because I like the views in my country and I also like the views in other countries.

原句中“do like”为强调用法，但在此并不需要；同时“of my country”用法不如“in my country”自然。建议：去掉不必要的助动词强调，使用介词“in”表示地点。

× For example, I really like how the parks are looked in my country and I also like how some buildings are constructed in other countries.

✓ For example, I really like how the parks look in my country, and I also like how some buildings are constructed in other countries.

“are looked”是错误的被动短语，应该用主动结构“parks look”表示外观；第二部分“are constructed”可保留被动表示建造方式。建议：表示外观用主动结构（look），被动表示被建造或被设计时才用被动。