视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (‘memories’ used too many times), and add one specific detail or example. Use a linking phrase to expand briefly.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me preserve happy moments. For example, when I visited the coast last year I took several landscape photos that remind me of the colours and atmosphere of that day.

建議: Give a clear direct answer and support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Avoid vague phrases like ‘many kind of things’ and instead name features of urban views.

範例: I prefer urban views because cities offer architectural variety and lively street scenes. For instance, skyscrapers, markets and public art create interesting photo opportunities that capture a city’s character.

建議: Make the sentence structure simpler and correct tense and grammar. State your preference clearly, give a reason and a short example. Replace awkward phrases like ‘see the things regular’ with ‘see the same places regularly’.

範例: I prefer taking photos in other countries because the scenery and culture are different from what I see at home. For example, I photographed colourful street markets in Marrakech that felt completely new compared with my local city.

× Yes, I prefer to take pictures of different views because it creates lot of memories and I love to explore new memories in my life.

✓ Yes, I prefer to take pictures of different views because it creates a lot of memories and I love to make new memories in my life.

Errors: 'creates lot of memories' is missing the article 'a' before 'lot' and 'explore new memories' is unnatural collocation. Use 'make new memories' or 'create new memories'. Suggestion: add 'a' to form 'a lot of memories' and replace 'explore' with 'make' for natural phrasing.

× I prefer views in urban areas because there are many kind of things in which we can see views and also store our memories.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because there are many kinds of things where we can see interesting scenes and also store our memories.

Errors: 'many kind of things' should be 'many kinds of things' (number agreement and plural noun). 'in which we can see views' is awkward; use 'where we can see interesting scenes'. Suggestion: pluralize 'kind' to 'kinds' and rephrase for natural English.

× As I visit somewhere in other countries, I prefer to take views because in my country I see the things regular, but when I visit to another country I take views because it was the new experience for me.

✓ When I visit other countries, I prefer to take photos because in my country I see things regularly, but when I visit another country I take photos because it is a new experience for me.

Multiple errors: 'As I visit somewhere in other countries' is ungrammatical; use 'When I visit other countries'. 'take views' is incorrect; use 'take photos' or 'take pictures'. 'see the things regular' should be 'see things regularly' (adverb form). 'visit to another country' should be 'visit another country' (no 'to'). 'because it was the new experience' should be present tense 'because it is a new experience' to express general truth. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('visit other countries'), correct noun choice ('photos'), adverb form ('regularly'), remove unnecessary 'to', and use present tense for general statements.