视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Melhore a naturalidade e concisão. Evite pausas com "uh" e repetições como "really beautiful" e explique com detalhes específicos (quando, onde, o que o torna especial). Use uma estrutura clara: frase-topo + 1–2 frases de suporte com ligações.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing landscapes, especially the mountain near my apartment. In winter it gets covered in snow, which creates striking contrasts and soft light that make every photo look dramatic. I often shoot at sunrise when the colors are at their best.

建議: Torne a resposta mais direta e evite repetir ideias. Conecte a explicação ao motivo concreto (acessibilidade, variedade, light conditions) e elimine informações irrelevantes ou mal formuladas. Use conectores como "because" e "for example".

範例: I prefer urban views because they offer a wide variety of subjects and are easy to access. For example, city streets have interesting architecture and night lighting that allow me to take diverse shots without traveling far.

建議: Corrija erros e seja claro. Evite frases confusas como "if it has to mountain" e "prepare myself in the alcohol". Mencione razões específicas por que prefere o local (paisagem, cultura, luz) e mantenha a resposta curta e lógica. Use ligações: "because", "so", "for example".

範例: Although I'm from Brazil, I prefer photographing views in Japan, especially Mount Fuji, because its symmetry and seasonal changes create stunning compositions. For example, in winter the snow adds dramatic contrast, and I hope to climb it one day after proper training.

× I like taking pictures of the mountains because here in my city, there is a mountain near my apartment, uh, which is really beautiful, special on winter, uh, it's covered by the snow, so it becomes really beautiful.

✓ I like taking pictures of the mountains because here in my city there is a mountain near my apartment which is really beautiful, especially in winter when it is covered by snow, so it looks very beautiful.

The sentence misuses 'special on winter' and 'covered by the snow'. Use 'especially in winter' and 'covered by snow' for natural English. Also add a clause connector 'when it is covered by snow' to link ideas. Keep 'there is' usage but remove extra commas for clarity.

× I prefer views in urban areas because I think it's easier to take pictures.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because I think it's easier to take pictures there.

The original is mostly correct, but adding 'there' clarifies location. 'To take' is the correct infinitive; no -ing form is needed after 'easier to'. Ensure the infinitive form follows 'easier to'.

× I want to become an actress in the future, but my second option is to become a photographer or something like that.

✓ I want to become an actress in the future, but my second option is to become a photographer or something similar.

'Or something like that' is colloquial; 'something similar' is more appropriate in formal responses. Sentence structure is fine otherwise.

× So I prefer urban areas because it's easier to taking pictures.

✓ So I prefer urban areas because it's easier to take pictures.

After 'easier to' use the base form of the verb (infinitive) without -ing. 'To taking' is incorrect; use 'to take'.

× I am from Brazil but I live in Japan right now, so I will take Japan because of the Fujiyama, which is a very beautiful mountain.

✓ I am from Brazil but I live in Japan right now, so I would choose Japan because of Mount Fuji, which is a very beautiful mountain.

'I will take Japan' is incorrect for preference; use 'I would choose Japan' or 'I prefer Japan'. 'Fujiyama' is better rendered as 'Mount Fuji'. This corrects the expression of preference and the mountain name.

× Uh, it's really similar to if it has to mountain and it's really beautiful.

✓ It really looks like it has two peaks and it's very beautiful.

The original is ungrammatical and unclear. Likely meaning: Mount Fuji looks as if it has two peaks. Rephrase using 'looks like it has two peaks' for clarity and correct structure.

× When it's winter, I love taking pictures of there.

✓ In winter, I love taking pictures there.

Use 'in winter' rather than 'when it's winter' for brevity, and place 'there' after 'pictures' to indicate location. 'Taking pictures of there' is incorrect; use 'taking pictures there' or 'taking pictures of it'.

× My dream is to climb that mountain one day but I'm a little scared of it.

✓ My dream is to climb that mountain one day, but I'm a little scared of it.

Sentence is correct; only punctuation adjusted by adding a comma before 'but'. The tense 'is to climb' correctly expresses a future aspiration.

× But I will prepare myself in the alcohol.

✓ But I will prepare myself with alcohol.

'Prepare myself in the alcohol' is incorrect preposition use. If the student means they will use alcohol to prepare (which is odd), use 'with alcohol'. However, likely intended meaning is 'I will prepare myself mentally' or 'I will prepare myself for it', so a better correction would be 'I will prepare myself for it.'