视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: ปรับประโยคให้เป็นธรรมชาติและถูกต้องทางไวยากรณ์มากขึ้น โดยเริ่มด้วยประโยคตรง ๆ เป็นหัวข้อ แล้วตามด้วยรายละเอียดสั้น ๆ ใช้คำเชื่อมที่เหมาะสม และหลีกเลี่ยงการซ้ำคำ เช่น 'picture' และ 'view' มากเกินไป ควรแก้คำผิด (เช่น take picture -> take pictures, what was there -> what was there) และจัดเรียงความคิดให้ชัดเจนมากขึ้น

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I do this because photos help me remember places and moments clearly, and I often share them with friends to describe what made the scene beautiful.

建議: แก้คำศัพท์และไวยากรณ์ (law area -> rural area, green glass -> green grass, make me feel -> made me feel) และตอบโดยเริ่มด้วยประโยคตรง ๆ ตามด้วยเหตุผลเฉพาะ ใช้คำเชื่อมเช่น 'because' และให้รายละเอียดที่สอดคล้องกันไม่เกิน 3-4 ประโยค

範例: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy wide blue skies, green grass and many trees. For example, a scene I saw recently made me feel refreshed by the cool breeze and the scent of cut grass.

建議: ปรับประโยคให้กระชับและชัดเจน แก้ไวยากรณ์ (have -> has, I have been explore -> I have explored) และอธิบายเหตุผลเฉพาะเจาะจง เช่นความคุ้นเคย ความหลากหลายของธรรมชาติ หลีกเลี่ยงประโยคที่ไม่สมบูรณ์หรือคลุมเครือ

範例: I prefer views in my own country because I feel more at home there and its natural landscapes are uniquely beautiful. Even though I have visited other countries, I find that no place matches the familiar scenery and atmosphere of my homeland.

× I love to take picture of different view because every time I take the picture, it's also captured in my memory too.

✓ I love to take pictures of different views because every time I take a picture, it is captured in my memory.

The noun 'picture' and 'view' need plural forms when speaking generally; use 'pictures' and 'views'. 'Take picture of' requires the plural or singular with article: 'take a picture' or 'take pictures'. 'It's also captured in my memory too' is redundant: 'also' and 'too' both indicate the same meaning; use one and match subject: 'it is captured in my memory.' Use present simple for habitual action. Suggestion: say 'I love to take pictures of different views because every time I take a picture it is captured in my memory.'

× Furthermore, I can use that picture to talk to my friend what was there and how was that look beautiful.

✓ Furthermore, I can use those pictures to tell my friends what was there and how beautiful it looked.

Incorrect clause order and incorrect verb for reporting. Use 'use those pictures to tell my friends' (plural agreement). Reported content requires 'what was there and how beautiful it looked' (not 'how was that look beautiful'). Use 'tell' + object + content. Also match plural 'pictures' and 'friends'. Suggestion: 'I can use those pictures to tell my friends what was there and how beautiful it looked.'

× I prefer view in law area because I love to see a blue sky, green glass and plenty of trees.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I love to see a blue sky, green grass and plenty of trees.

'law area' is incorrect; intended 'rural area(s)'. Preposition 'in' is okay but 'views in rural areas' is natural and plural. 'green glass' is a spelling error; should be 'green grass'. Use plural 'views' when speaking generally. Suggestion: 'I prefer views in rural areas because I love to see a blue sky, green grass and plenty of trees.'

× The view of Lulu earlier make me feel like fresh air blowing my nose and the smell of grass.

✓ The view of Lulu earlier made me feel the fresh air on my face and the smell of grass.

Tense mismatch: 'earlier' signals past; use past tense 'made' not 'make'. 'Feel like fresh air blowing my nose' is unnatural; use 'feel the fresh air on my face' or 'as if fresh air was blowing on my face.' 'Smell of grass' should be 'the smell of grass.' Suggestion: 'The view of Lulu earlier made me feel the fresh air on my face and the smell of grass.'

× I prefer view in my own country because my own country have a beautiful nature that I have been explore all the countries but there is no place that have the same view and every time I look at the view it feels so.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because my country has beautiful nature; I have explored many countries but none has the same views, and every time I look at the view it feels wonderful.

Multiple errors: use plural 'views' and 'in my own country'. Subject-verb agreement: 'my country have' should be 'my country has'. Verb form: 'I have been explore' should be 'I have explored'. 'All the countries' is unclear; 'many countries' is better. 'no place that have' -> 'none has'. 'it feels so' is incomplete; use an adjective like 'wonderful.' Also adjust punctuation and clauses for clarity. Suggestion: 'I prefer views in my own country because my country has beautiful nature; I have explored many countries but none has the same views, and every time I look at the view it feels wonderful.'