视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is enthusiastic and relevant, but it is slightly long, has some awkward phrasing and minor grammar issues. Aim for a clear topic sentence, one or two concise supporting details, and correct word choice. Use linking words to make the list smoother and avoid redundancy (e.g., “everything nature” → “everything in nature”).

範例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. I’m passionate about nature photography, so I often photograph the sky, the sea and plants; these images help me remember places and moments.

建議: The main idea is clear, but the response has repetition, awkward grammar and unclear phrasing (e.g., “shows you closer”). Make a direct topic sentence, give one or two specific reasons with linking words, and avoid repeating words like “areas.”

範例: I prefer rural views because they feel more natural and peaceful. For example, there are fewer buildings and more open spaces, so I can see fields and trees clearly and enjoy quieter surroundings.

建議: The meaning is unclear due to word choice errors (e.g., “fusing my country,” “chippings,” “go back to litter”). Clarify whether you prefer your own country, then give specific sensory details and a brief reason. Use correct vocabulary for sounds and memories and keep sentences concise.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and comforting. For instance, walking by the roadside while birds sing and leaves rustle, I often take photos to capture those memories and revisit them later.

× Yes, I do love taking pictures of different views.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures of different views.

The original sentence uses the auxiliary 'do' with 'love' unnecessarily for emphasis. In simple present affirmative sentences with 'I', do-support is not required. Remove 'do' to form natural usage: 'I love'. Suggestion: Use 'I love' instead of 'I do love' unless you want to emphasize contrast or strong feeling.

× As a lover of nature and with my passion for photography, I enjoy taking pictures of the sky as little as the gravels, the sand, the sea, the trees, the flowers, everything nature and it helps me to remember.

✓ As a lover of nature with a passion for photography, I enjoy taking pictures of the sky, gravel, sand, the sea, trees, flowers — everything in nature, and it helps me remember.

Problems: unnecessary 'with' duplication and awkward list items. 'Gravels' is incorrect plural; the uncountable noun 'gravel' is used. 'Everything nature' is missing preposition; use 'everything in nature'. Also remove 'to' after 'helps me' because 'helps me remember' is correct. Suggestions: simplify the opening phrase to 'with a passion', use 'gravel' (uncountable), add commas for list clarity, and use 'everything in nature'.

× I prefer views in rural areas because the rural areas, they feel more natural than urban areas where we have lots of buildings, we have lots of companies and all but rural areas it shows you closer.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they feel more natural than urban areas, which have many buildings and companies; rural areas feel closer to nature.

Problems: redundant noun phrase 'the rural areas, they' and unclear pronoun reference. 'Lots of' is informal; use 'many'. 'It shows you closer' is ungrammatical and unclear; replaced with 'feel closer to nature' to convey intended meaning. Suggestions: avoid repeating subjects with pronouns, use relative clauses ('which') for clarity, and choose precise verbs.

× I prefer fusing my country.

✓ I prefer staying in my country.

The verb 'fusing' is incorrect here; likely intended meaning is 'staying' or 'being in'. 'Prefer' requires a clear verb or noun phrase; use 'staying in my country' or 'my own country'. Suggestion: choose an appropriate verb like 'staying' or 'visiting' depending on context.

× Imagine working along the road, hearing the chippings of the birds, the whistling of the trees and taking pictures of those to remember.

✓ Imagine working along the road, hearing the chirping of birds and the rustling of the trees, and taking pictures to remember the scene.

Problems: 'chippings' is incorrect; correct noun is 'chirping' (or verb 'chirping' as noun Gerund). 'Whistling of the trees' is odd; 'rustling' is more natural. 'Taking pictures of those to remember' is awkward; clarify 'taking pictures to remember the scene.' Suggestions: use correct noun forms and parallel structure for the participial phrases (hearing... and taking...).

× A lot to keep and go back to litter.

✓ There is a lot to keep and to look back on.

The original is ungrammatical and unclear. Likely meant 'a lot to keep and to look back on' or 'many memories to keep and revisit.' 'Litter' is incorrect contextually. Suggestion: use idiomatic expressions such as 'look back on' or 'return to'.

× It's a really wonderful feeling.

✓ It's a really wonderful feeling.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present tense and fits the context. No change necessary.